Wow.... I'm absolutely happy that you've written this fic. It's given readers an insight into the beginnings of the Jack/Rachel relationship, the hurt that both of them feel and also more about Lily as a baby.
I love your descriptiveness in the fic, making the pain feel real for both Rach and Jack, the emotions they have and the start of something really special. I like reading the thoughts that both Jack and Rachel are thinking about before deciding to move forward together.
Brilliant fic and I hope that we see more one-shots in the future.