Again that was just amazing You're really doing a great job with this and i love how you've managed to involve so many different people.
The start was so intense. I really felt for Rachel and you wrote her sense of desperation so well. It's good how Rachel was questioning herself; as i think anyone would in her situation. It would be very forgiveable if she had made a mistake. I did love that it was only a tiny scar that made her so sure it was Tony. It's such an insignificant thing but for to remember that about him proves so much i think. Loved the little line about how she remembered Tony told her he had his won doctor at home. I guess from Mr Wallis's point of view she is having a kind of emotional breakdown and i understand why he wants to have her sectioned. Any outsider would believe she had truely gone mad with grief. I didn't really like how he was patronising towards her though; i think he needs to be a little more sympathetic if he believes she really needs help. I am glad he let her call Jack though Annoyed though that he didn't think for one second she could be right and just assumed she was going crazy. Not liking him so much so far!
The shoe shopping with Jack and Martha was hilarious and you wrote them both perfectly! I could totally picture it and it was nice to have some light relief after such an intense beginning!
I thought it was really good how much Jack defended Rachel at first but then he also doubted her and got angry. I think that's really realistic and you managed to show his range of emotions really well. It was sad when he begged her not to believe it as he didn't want to go through the pain again. More than anything he seemed a little scared about everything. I am glad that he got angry enough to go and see and judging by his reaction it seems that Rachel is not crazy!
Can't wait for more!
