
KittCatt
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Great chapter! Like that Skye and Oscar seem to have had a natural date with things moving slowly. Also like that Skye has Olivia to confide in. Olivia being with VJ is interesting. Things are still a little awkward between Oscar and Maddy but I'm glad they are still friends. Nice mention that Matt's a little older than the rest of them, i often forget that. I look forward to seeing whats to come
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Glad you are writing another story Great start with a flashback. It's nice that you explored Kyle's background a bit. I suspect that his foster care background is going to come up again. Kyle and Tamara are going to be parents soon and Kyle couldn't be happier. I enjoy Kyle with Tamara as well as Phoebe so I like that Phoebe is there to support both Kyle and Tamara. I do wonder what is going to happen if Ash is right and Phoebe does still have underlying feelings for Kyle. And Kat seems to enjoy spending time with Ash without Phoebe around so.. I wonder what you have in store for Kyle and everyone else throughout this story. I look forward to more
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Great start! I really enjoy any interaction between Oscar and Skye so i think I'm going to like this story! Also appreciate the friendships within the teens, as well as some of the romances. Wasn't expecting Matt and Maddy to be together Interested to see where you go from here, I look forward to more
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Exactly. She is a terrible mother who time after time put her own selfish needs above the needs of her kids. They are better with their Dad. And she will never get her kids back now. Kyle's logic is seriously flawed and i don't understand why he can't see what is in front of him. He chose someone else over his own family, and now has to pay for a crime he didn't commit. Kyle deserved more than this. An underused character with depth and range, especially considering Nic's strengths. The writers could've done a lot more with him but he was reduced to a background character. An absolutely poorly structured exit. Send him to jail for something he did, not covering for a selfish, lying mother who he has been 'in love' for 5 minutes.
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Great final chapter! Liked that you did a fast forward to Kyle leaving the psychiatric hospital- his home for the past 8 months. Glad he was ready to leave. Was very sad when his own children didn't really recognize him. Re-building a relationship with the boys and Tamara as well as everyone else would be top priority. I continue to like the friendships between Kat and Tamara, as well as Andy and Kyle. Glad Kyle's managing his pain and the money from the deal has been put to very good use. Glad that Josh and Evie are happy. Really liked the ending at Phoebe's grave. I think Kyle needed to say goodbye one last time to move on with his life completely, though she will always be with him. I'm glad he can think of her and not feel guilt- instead can be happy looking back over his memories. Also glad Ash was there and that he was looking well. Once again a gripping story, great writing and characterization. I hope you continue with your writing. Lovely work
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Great Chapter! So Ash was the last one to see Phoebe, which could explain his guilt and drinking himself to death. It's still not his fault though- only Tank. When Josh walked in i thought things were really going to go pear shaped but he said what Kyle needed to hear. Evidence that it wasn't his fault. Now he has to live with what he has done and try to recover, physically and psychologically. Interesting that Andy has nightmares and suffers guilt and some anxiety after what Tank did to everyone. He and Kat have a great relationship, hope he gets better. Glad he doesn't blame Kyle at all. Now Tamara is feeling extremely guilty because she didn't notice her husbands state. I hope when Kyle gets better they can begin to work through their problems and try to regain their relationship. With all of Kyle's injuries, i don't know how he is going to survive with the pain. Wonderful writing as usual! Really captures the audience. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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Great Chapter! The flashback was interesting - a nice exploration of Kyle's guilt and how just a piece of clothing can be so meaningful. I wonder where the jacket is now. Like how Tamara is continuing to reason with Kyle by talking and engaging with Phoebe. Poor Andy too. Tamara made the right decision not to say anything when Josh came over- he couldn't help them, though Bonnie seemed distressed. I think Kat should've came over instead. It would be so distressing for Tamara to see Kyle like this. And then he starts cutting himself while smiling and she wonders who is he and how long he had been like this. You write it very well I look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Glad Tamara is trying to reason with Kyle aka 'Phoebe' by telling him she loves him . It must be so awful to see him like this but at least she knows he is not himself. She can't do much about it though... Silly Josh covering for his brother but at least he came clean in the end and now he and Kat are really worried. She has the right to be worried, and considering everything that has happened she should tell other cops as soon as possible. Looks like 'Phoebe' might tell Tamara about what Kyle didn't do on the lead up to Phoebe's death. Getting that off his chest might actually help Kyle now though, and Tamara might be able to tell him that he couldn't have prevented Tank's attack. Though i wonder if Kyle might blame Tamara, even unconsciously, because she wanted him home, so he left Phoebe to be with her and then couldn't save Phoebe. Excited to see whats next
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Great Chapter! Ohh poor Andy and Tamara Both are in great danger from 'Phoebe' aka Kyle. He went downhill sooner than i thought. I don't know how Tamara is going to get out of this one, Kyle is not going to recognize that he is hurting her and hurt Andy anytime soon. As always, great writing, great suspense. You captured Andy's horror at his friend hurting him well, as well as Kyle's pain when 'Phoebe' was hurting Andy. I look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Ohh dear.. looks like Kyle's mental health has deteriorated even more. Now 'Phoebe' has hurt Andy. I don't know how he is going to explain this.. Glad Tamara is getting Kyle the help he needs. Glad she recognized that he is not himself and might be seeing things. Liked her chat with Kat. Kat has past experience with domestic violence but it's not totally the same thing. I look forward to more
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Great Chapter Loved the flashback at the start. Really showed the differences between Phoebe as she was back then and ghost Phoebe. And Kyle see's it too but still can't stop seeing her. Creepy Phoebe watching him as he showered Andy found out just how badly Kyle's body is doing. Good that he called Nate but i think he needs someone with more expertise. Hopefully Kyle will be honest and confront his demons sooner rather than later. Poor Kyle.. Tamara and the kids are still gone I look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Oh dear, it looks like their is big trouble ahead for Tamara and Kyle, as well as Josh and Evie. Poor Kyle, with Phoebe terrorizing him and everything else going on he was bound to explode eventually- verbally and physically. Now he has scared Tamara after yelling at Josh. He and Evie need to work out a way to stop the deal- Josh is seemingly oblivious to Evie's discomfort and Tamara just wants the money. The begining with Kyle sewing his wound back together was slightly disturbing... As is Phoebe still wanting to kiss him Update soon, i look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Poor Kyle. Liked the flashback. I get why Kyle would feel guilty about going home to Tamara instead of seeing Phoebe. I wonder what exactly Ash did to make her so upset. But now Ash is going to drink himself to death. I don't know if telling Ash would help him or just create more problems. But something needs to be done regarding Ash. Feel sorry for both Kyle and Tamara. Their relationship is not what it used to be- Kyle is the shell of the man he used to be, who Tamara fell in love with. I get why she wants to agree to selling the rights, but she shouldn't force Kyle. Otherwise he may end up resenting her and their problems could be even worse. But he also needs to understand the context of the movie- the psychology aspect behind all their trauma. Great writing, update soon
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Great Chapter! Glad Evie and Josh came to visit. Sounds like Josh is the one who actually wants to sell the rights and Evie wants to move on. I understand his perspective but i think it will open up too many old wounds for everyone. Evie should've told him how she really felt but glad Kyle did because he had valid points. Though the manner in which he said them wasn't the nicest. I still wonder what Tank did to Josh that Andy and Kat are so horrified about. Really liked Josh holding his niece though And Andy being disappointed Evie wasn't pregnant. So Phoebe's father blamed Kyle for Phoebe's death. Poor Kyle. Feeling to blame for Phoebe's death for years would be absolutely terrible. Creepy when Phoebe kissed him I think he really needs to tell someone about Phoebe, because she is doing serious damage, especially when she is angry. I'm not sure how long he can continue like this Another great chapter, great characterization, detail and writing. I look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Liked the flashback. More information about what lead to Phoebe's death is interesting. So Kyle left the hospital before the psych evaluation. Can't say i blame him but he does need to get help. Sooner rather than later before 'Phoebe' does worse. Glad Tamara has Andy to talk to. He is right, she does need to look after herself. She has got a lot on her plate though- kids, Kyle, and they need some sort of income. All that stress and worry won't be good for her. I look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Really enjoying the development of Phoebe and her terrorizing Kyle. It's very interesting to read, well done! Glad Kyle felt safe enough to tell his doctor and am glad he came out of that more hopeful. Phoebe though... She blames Kyle for her being dead, which makes sense seeing as Kyle probably blames himself too, at least on some level, conscious or unconscious even though it is no one but Tank's fault. Nice ending. Horrible that Tamara had to see that. Hope he is okay I look forward to more
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I totally agree that Kyle has great potential that has been completely wasted. Nic is a great actor who shines when he is given the right material. But the writer's have barely even tried to integrate him into the community. With the other Braxton's gone i thought he might be able to get some good character development this past year but it seems that is not going to happen. In fact the opposite. He finally gets a storyline for himself where he is not just giving advice to Ricky/ Nate/Ash and so on, but it's such a poorly constructed storyline that i'm finding Kyle to be absolutely stupid. Does he really think Isla deserves her kids? She is completely selfish and has absolutely no regard for her children's needs. Why does Kyle have the need to protect her?? Because i don't buy what he has said so far. Ultimately i think the writers have made a massive mistake taking Kyle down this route. Some might say Kyle deserves it considering what he has done in the past, but i was really hoping the writers would explore his character more and take him away from the crime storylines once he was the only Braxton left. But i don't have much hope..
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I really don't know why she gets the amount of hate she does. Personally I'm not a fan of her singing but she's certainly not the worst actress in the world. And yes, this storyline with Kyle is absolutely horrid. Are we supposed to feel like she deserves to get her kids back? She is completely selfish. If she cared about her kids more than herself she would leave them with their father who seems to be quite capable of providing love, care and support for them.
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Great Chapter! Poor Kyle having sepsis. And to help him get through it there's Phoebe . I like how you have written the transition from Phoebe being nice and something Kyle needed to something Kyle is now terrorized from. Great work. I also understand that Kyle is scared to tell the entire truth regarding seeing Phoebe, but i don't know how well he is going to cope if she continues to appear like this. Update soon
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Great Chapter! I'm glad the nerve block helped Kyle live like a normal father for a few days. Also like the fact that Kyle knows he needs to take his medication at specific times so he won't be tempted to start taking more. Sad that he has had thoughts about ending all the pain but it's understandable. Glad he is staying on track for the his family. Phoebe's back but she's not the same, angry at him for forgetting about her. Poor Kyle. I wonder how he's going to explain this now. I look forward to more, update soon
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Great Chapter! Like that Kyle can enjoy his anniversary pain free. Though it is temporary and i fear he will be worse off once the pain returns. It's interesting that when he is not in pain he cannot see Phoebe. He doesn't need her to help make him happy when he is already quite happy from being pain free. She seemed to help him through a lot over the past years. But now he realizes that seeing her was not normal. How he will explain this all to Tamara i don't know... Love how everyone got together to celebrate. I like that Andy is a father. One month old is such a cute age Hope Josh returns for a while to see his niece. I understand Andy still feeling guilty for not doing anything during the hostage situation but i'm glad no one holds any resentment towards him. Great writing as usual, i look forward to more
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Great Chapter! Poor Kyle, having to work while in constant pain. And not being able to hold his kids the way he wants to. Poor Ash too. Glad Billie's still there to help him. Drinking's not the answer though. Hope he can move forward eventually. Glad Tamara's parents can babysit. Interesting that Kyle is seeing and talking with ghost/ imaginary Phoebe. I always liked their relationship and i get that her death has affected him a lot. I also like how you have included her as she would normally act, she's making Kyle smile and laugh. I don't think he should feel guilt for being happy when Phoebe's around, though i wonder what everyone else, specifically Tamara would think. I assume he hasn't told anyone. Really enjoying this so far, I look forward to more
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Ohh great start to a great story! Love seeing Kyle as a dad! Like that Tamara is supportive because he is in constant pain. Life must be extremely hard for both of them. Makes me hate Tank even more. I wonder if Tamara still feels guilty about taking the knife out of him, though i'm not sure what permanent damage that would have done Look forward to seeing where you take this story Update soon
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As someone who didn’t really believe Maddy was in love with Oscar I didn’t mind that they broke up. But the way they broke up was terrible, pushed forward by the writers so that Maddy could date someone else. I don’t think there is any denying that the writers decided to make Oscar cheat so that the audience would hate him and therefore believe Maddy could do better with someone else -Matt. It was cheap and unnecessary. And Maddy lost any sympathy I had (not that I had much) after what she said to Oscar when she found out. The whole premise of the love triangle was boring, predicable and made all characters look bad, no matter how much the writers tried to make only Oscar the bad one. And I agree that for the most part they do tend to bring out the worst in each other. I don’t believe they are compatible for a long term adult relationship. This relationship offer’s nothing I haven’t seen from either of them before- a teenage fling where they will most likely eventually realize they are incompatible. Having similar interests and similar personalities doesn't automatically make them compatible, and dealing with adult problems like renting and living together doesn't mean they are in an adult relationship, especially considering how immature and inconsiderate they both can be. But, ultimately the underlying reason I can’t get behind them is that I don’t believe they are in love. He began loving her for seemingly shallow reasons, and not long after she found out she proclaimed her love for him too. But why does she love him? I needed some reasons why she was so quick to ditch Oscar for him but I didn’t get any. It was way too quick in my opinion, and their whole relationship seems quite shallow and boring as a result.
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Wow.. great chapter to finish of a great story. You truly have a gift! Great writing with a great plot that explored the characters in depth. Loved seeing the roller coaster everyone has been on. The pure villain in the story was really well written and executed, and i liked how you consistently explored the consequences physically and psychologically to everyone involved. It began with Josh dealing with his vision loss but ended with a huge variety of characters experiencing so much pain (Kyle for example). Anyway, onto the chapter: I liked the interview - It was a great way to explain what had happened during the past 2 years. Really happy Josh and Evie got back together and that they begun writing as a way to try to overcome the horrors they went through. Great to see them move forward with their lives and go to uni. Ooh i like the idea of Tamara and Kyle becoming parents. That would be great to see. So sad that Kyle is in so much pain but it's realistic. I liked the addition of Bonnie! Also like that Andy and Kat stayed together. And Oscar and Andrew- that was a suprise but i liked it. Glad that Oscar and Josh were there for Evie with no hard feelings. And i liked Andy realizing how much he his going to miss Josh and Evie... and how much free time he's gonna have now. Lastly, glad everyone seems to be moving forward slowly. But that video.. i don't think Kat and Andy should've watched it. Not without Josh's permission. And now they are going to have to live with it... But it was a great ending!! Is there a sequel?? I enjoyed reading your story very much, so thank you for sharing!! Hope you continue writing in the future!