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What a completely harrowing but beautifully written chapter ILM. I think you have every right to change your characters' histories because you do it so well. The fact that it was a Gypsy centred chapter was just a bonus! But geez, it's sickening and scary that people like that do exist. And you were probably right that they were mentally unstable. Which makes it all the more sad Thank you for a great distraction from my politics essay ILM, I will give you more flattering and specific comments when I have the chance

Thanks, I don't think anybody else liked it. No more reviews either here or on fanfic.net. Well I liked it very much indeed, and you must remember that the forum has been down for several days now. Whilst tastes differ, and I know that people who like Jack and Martha might not like to read about Irene and Barry, I have always thought that this should not blind them to good writing, and you should also look to see how many people are reading your chapters, not how many are reviewing it. If lots of people are reading it, and I think that they are, then that is the main thing. Sometimes people don't always know what to say, particularly when its a piece of writing which is outside of their usual experience. That does not mean they don't like it. So please don't let the lack of comments put you off. I too was very moved by this. I liked the way you got inside of the the young Irene's head, and how we could see what life must have been like for her as a child. It fitted in so well with what we know of Irene, and of her battling spirit. She looks out for kids today just like she looked out for her brothers and sisters and that made so much sense. The way on which her story intertwined with Barry's was very effective and like Maggie I thought the stars analogy was particularly effective. This was very mature writing , and I enjoyed reading it. It was one of the best things that I have read on BTTB in a long time. I agree with Bareenfan about the forum being down and also the popularity of J&M in contrast to a mature couple such as Bareen. Also don't forget that the Easter long weekend has just ended so people have probably been very busy. This was such a powerful chapter and I agree with what has already been said - about its reality and just how well it fits in with Irene's charactisation. I could really imagine that being the eleven year old Irene. Also agree about the image of Benji peeing himself. You've linked Irene's immediate family so well with her own family and it really was sad that her wish of having a stable family was never fulfilled. I also loved that connection built between the siblings despite all their different fathers. It really was them against the world. The ending was tragic though, it really was I really don't know where to start with pulling out excerps like I usually do because there are so many beautiful ones. So I'll just say that my favourite was definitely the last paragraph about the starts and the loneliness she felt. And your last line was just brilliant. It was so simple yet so beautiful. I really am in awe of your writing! Don't feel disheartened by the lack of reviews. Maybe people feel intimidated by its maturity and feel the review needs that as well. Just like Bareenfan said, concentrate on how many people have read it rather than have reviewed it.

Sorry ILM for not reviewing. I've just been in Sydney with my out of date relatives with no internet the last couple of months. But geez! 3 chapters...what a great way to return!! It took a lot of trouble going back through the thread and hoping not to catch a glimpse of something I didn't want to be spoiled about. You know ILM, you just write so immaculately. It just flows so naturally and your description is fantastic. But the best thing and the most addictive thing about your writing (and in my opinion, any piece of writing) is your characterisation. You do it so wonderfully that even a minor character like Joe Briscoe feels real without effort. In one line you were able to just capture the fact that he was a real person. Someone who can connect with this Martha because he himself has a family, and his own life. Kudos to you. Megan also really brings something special to your whole story. I know you're building it up and I can't wait to see it unfold. This was a lovely description. The ornamental pond that had once attracted visitors to the now defunct restaurant with its laser beam dancing water show was dried out except for the rainwater still dripping down from rusty pipes. The peaceful rhythmic dripping suddenly called an old tune to her mind. Something about moon and stars and guardians of sleepers. Most of the words had long since been lost in translation over eons of time, her grandmother had said, and few that made any sense remained in living memory. Geez, Hayley can be such a bitch. And I don’t need jerks in my life, Crazy Cassie. Unlike you, I have real friends. Who the hell wants to hang out with you? Even your precious Martha’s deserted you now. Can’t say I blame her.”She's so deluded with the fact that she thinks she has real friends. But I like the way you write her so that the reader can see how sad it is. That the whole character of Hayley is tragic really, who does believe that she is right. THey're the people who are scary...who don't realise. Kind of like a monster that society created... I thought the focus on Barry was very emotionally powerful. The poor man. Again he sealed his lips over the tiny mouth and nose. All to no avail. He heard an unearthly, wolf-like howl and realised it came from himself. “I was thinking of my wife. Kerry. Irene, I...I..I...” And Barry Hyde, temporary principal of Summer Bay High while its regular principal Don Fisher was on a six month visit to New York to see relatives, and who could strike fear into the toughest student’s heart at five paces, broke down and wept like a child. I guess we do all know the story but it was such a tragically sad one. I like how you have focused on such a different array of characters, not just the teens. And that Martha/Kane scene was very intense...and really funny. Genius with the Barbie girl ringtone. LOL. I loved the Noah/Kit scenes, they are gorgeous. I also like the friendship they've developed with Gypsy and Jack. Poor Gypsy!! You were right about the fic being hard to keep up with ILM. You've written so much about so many different people!! But I love it. Keep it coming!

Whoa Martha, calm down woman! I didn't see that coming either! I agree with Kat, loved her backstory. The opening passage was great, it was a good start that sucked you right into her life. I really love that farmgirl side of Martha and her interaction with her brothers. And good on her for finally telling Hayley where to go. But now I'm scared for Cassie and how she'll cope with being cooped up with Hayley and Adam And Noah and Kit.. They are so sweet. They are so great together, I really love that you included how they got together. You could probably write a whole fan fiction revolving around them! I've always loved the idea of those two but it's so much better in this fic - the "ugly" anti-social girl gets the hearthrob who happens to be dating the most popular girl at school. Haha, can you tell I'm a sucker for a teen flick? She blew a sigh of relief that gently fluttered her fringe and flushed when Noah grinned, “You know, it’s cute when you do that. I always watch you in Math and know when you’ve solved some tricky problem...” “Watch me...?” Kit looked puzzled and it was Noah’s turn to blush. Aw. And ENGAGED? That's so awesome. I really hope its neither of them that dies now...it's always the happy ones who die I hope you had a good Christmas too ILM. Merry Christmas to everyone else as well

*Eagerly awaits* ...also scared for whoever dies...

You're definitely doing a lot right! It was more the demeanor of Megan that I found familiar with Luna. Not so much what she wore, but the quirkyness and not caring what others think of their appearance...and the fact they believe there is more than what meets the eye! Megan was brought in really well, I think mostly because she has a distinct personality. “Don’t even think of going there!” Martha stood with both fists on her hips, glaring at Cassie, and feeling like a rotten bully. But if bullying was what it took to make her best friend understand she was the victim here, then she’d bully without mercy. I love Martha/Cassie's friendship, I really do. And I'm loving Martha's personality. I'm not usually a Martha fan but she is so down to earth and strong in this fic. Hayley is just....hmm. Hayley! She is really aggravating but I'm sure that's what you were after! I agree with Kat, even though the Noah/Kit fluff was short it was very sweet. They do seem so stable. But...stable enough to be separated by an impending death?? very, very soon eh? I wonder who it is...and how!! What a teaser! Gypsy shrugged. “It’s okay. I’m used to it. You know how it goes. Throw out the garbo, someone. Oops, there goes Gypsy Nash! Ah, well, same difference.” “That’s not funny.” “Wasn’t meant to be.” Gypsy gave a mixed message, smiling brightly and yet talking in a choked voice. Awww I'm starting to turn to Gypsy/Jack too! I think everyone is...Even despite the popular Jack/Martha pairing and how awesome Will/Gyps are. I agree with Kat about Gypsy's character, she's so self-loathing that Jack is great for her. Still no reaction from the Martha/Kane call...eep more suspense! More reason to anticipate the next chapter!! Well done ILM on a brilliantly written chapter and great work Kat, I love your characters/ideas and the story that is unfolding.

Ohh! I liked it! I did, I did. I just must've missed it when you updated. I've read a few fics that I've been meaning to review once my exams are done (tomorrow...YAYYY) and I'll add this one to the list. Sorry ILM!! BTW I love Megan...I was wondering if she was an older character that was in H&A before I started watching as you are mixing them all up. But like Kat said, everyone knows somebody like her! She's great. Reminds me a bit of Luna Lovegood actually And thank you very much for that Kit/Noah fluff!! anyway...to be continued...

Yaaaay an update! And a great one too ILM! I loved it! I have to be quick and will review properly when I get the chance but just a few quick things. And indeed I have, a more descriptive review: I loved the beginning- you set up the scene so perfectly. Your descriptions of the institution were amazing, i was blown away by your writing. It was terrific to have an insight into Kane's mind (despite some disturbing views he has). He liked the solitude and the night. Knowing she would be free for a little while from the demons of her mind, cloaked in the quiet warmth of sleep. What a beautiful line! Such an insight into Kane's character. Pretty intense for him, seeing as he'd rather be portrayed as a pervet than admit how he feels about his mother. She liked music. When he was very small, she would sometimes break off from some chore and singing along to the radio pull him and Scotty into a dance. And then one day his father had arrived home unexpectedly, smashed the radio against the wall, and beaten her to a pulp while he and Scott trembled under the kitchen table. There was no more dancing after that. That was intense. There was a rumour Holden planned to get it on with every girl in their year. He’d seen him getting up close and personal with Gypsy Nash tonight and admired him for it. He’d made out with Gypsy himself and it was to be highly recommended. Once again, you really allow the reader to just see into the characters. Girls are objects to Kane, to test and experiment with. The Gypsy/Kit friendshop rocks, I remember loving them towards the beginning. Two of my favourite feisty chicks teaming up against Queen Bitch. And Kit & Noah? = more! more! more! I continue to love the Cassie/Martha friendship, and am still confused about Hayley's motives. She's a terrible person but is clearly shaken by Kane's advances - you'd think she'd cut Cassie some slack! God, it was like dealing with a child and anyway it annoyed her, the way Cassie and Martha always sprang to each other’s defence. Something revealing there? I think Hayley is becoming jealous and afraid the two may prefer each other than her. And that was a big surprise when Kane picked Martha, wonder what her reaction will be. All in all, well done on a fantastic update ILM! PS In return for all this flattery please put in a fluffy Noah/Kit moment somewhere in the next few chapters?

Aww sorry about the lack of comment ILM! I really hope it doesn't put you off writing because that chapter was so amazing!! The opening scene was so emotive and powerful. The destruction happening inside Cassie is so intense, she is just so broken at the moment I don't know how she can get better. And for couples and lovers, but not for Cassie, there were moonlight shadows and stars sparkling like diamonds, there were moonlight shadows to carry home dreams. And that was a beautiful line that just enhanced the mood. That was an unexpectant ending when Hayley decided to reveal what happened with Kane. To her own interests of course, not to Cassie's. I wonder what Cassie's reaction will be that someone who she sees as "perfect" has been in the same position. It was a god revelation that Hayley managed to get away from Kane too. Martha - brilliant! Even better - Drunk Martha! That was hilarious, so absolutely random when she passed out but it was great! The image of Gypsy just sitting alone, wet was so sad though. I'm torn between Martha/Jack, Jack/Gypsy, and Will/Gypsy!! And last but not least, the introduction of the Sutherland family was interesting. I'm a bit over them because of their massive screentime but I'm really liking this overprotectiveness. Poor Will though with his freudian slip!! Sorry about the late review. I hope you do find the motivation to keep writing ILM. And hopefully everyone who has read and loves this fic will comment lots and lots!!

With Kat's idea's and ILM's writing, this fic is produced with one of the best duos round ;) Don't sell yourself short though Kat, I have always loved this even when you were writing it. You're a great writing. But I understand losing motivation and it's great that ILM can continue it, especially because you write characters with so much depth! Poor poor Kimmy. And to think we all thought he was just a love sick puppy. Poor guy, having to put up with Barry's lack of respect. I loved this paragraph: Blond hair, blue eyes, muscles, fit, he was gorgeous - and a good, considerate lover too, Gypsy told him afterwards, slithering her naked body on top of him, making him think he would die of happiness. She leaned over him, smiling, her elbow propped up on the pillow to rest her chin, her beautiful tousled red hair falling down and tickling his face. “You’re not a boy anymore,” she drawled, drawing imaginary circles on his chest with her finger. Such a sexy, procative image of Gypsy telling Kim what he has always wanted to hear, making him feel worthy. And Gypsy and Jack! What a surprise. I'm really enjoying this "item". I'm really torn between them and Gypsy with Will. I'm just loving their need for comfort in each other's arms. “Deal!” Jack echoed, kissing her forehead and holding her tight. The rain had finally ceased and as the grey clouds slid sulkily away towards the sea more and more stars began to dance and twinkle through the darkness. They watched them together, dreaming dreams, warm in each other’s arms. Aww! That's all I can say about the finish! Can't wait for more.

That was fantastic ILM. It really showed Kim in a completely new light. I really love what's developing between Jack and Gypsy, not that I think they should be together but they are being honest with each other. I think it is a great relationship and I can see it developing into something strong, even if they end up not a couple anymore. This is really brief, I'll review properly but I can't stay long (I spent a lot of time reading this looooooong chapter ) Fantastic. And GREAT ideas Kat! You two make a brilliant team.

*screams and runs away* I haven't read a ghost story in god know's how long! Great work ILM!! Sorry for not reviewing earlier, I read the first chapter and didn't have time for the next so I thought I'd wait until I read both to review. I love the mix of characters! You've made me really miss Jade and Nick, and the innocence of Tasha and Robbie. Even Martha, who I generally dislike, is showing her roots of being a farm girl. It makes it so interesting. You write characters so well, exploring how they feel about each other and everything around them. A ghost story really brings out their personalities. I love how Tasha is like her old self, spiritual and able to sense another being. Her analysis of Robbie's footsteps was both sweet and intriguing. And I love Robbie's thoughts about Henry, and how you've incorporated him wanting to invent. Oh how I loved Robbie, and his quirkiness. I really wish he stayed that way (even though people do need to grow up). Aww, that is something I could really imagine Robbie feeling. Well done ILM, shame there won't be an update soon - but if you can convince Kat to update SBH that would be awesome too ;) I wonder what happens to Jade

*jumps around with Jess* Yaaayy! Thanks for the most brilliant update. I have really really missed this fic. Oh, we most definitely are still reading Kat And well done ILM, once again it was perfect. Gosh, how good was the character development? The insight into Hayley's mind actually let me feel sympathetic towards her, and understand why she is such a bitch even after what Kane did. I love that last line, and love how it connected to Cassie later on. That while they are both on different sides, they are in the same position. It explains how Hayley can be so self-assured as Queen Bee, it's the only time she can be on the inside. Poor Cassie is all I could think. The poor girl has been through so much already and instead of the support she has had on the show, she is portrayed as Crazy Cassie in this fic. I enjoyed reading it from Hayley and Kane's point of view of how she was so unpredictable and weird instead of from Cassie's memory. ILM you did a great job there, letting the reader understand what was going on without having to spell it out, or having Cassie try to defend herself, or even be aware that that was how people saw her. I love the friendship facade between Cassie, Hayley, and Martha. It is so deep on so many levels. It's good to see Martha becoming angrier and realising she is better. Though this does show that beneath the bitchiness and pettiness, there is genuine concern there. There are just so many subtle hints and directions in your writing ILM, where you don't need to spell out anything yet it just all makes perfect sense. HA! That was a classic It's really great to see this one back. I look forward to reading more. Sorry if this review was a bit rambly and not much sense

Awww it's so good to see how many Mattie and Lucas fans there are about! I had almost given up hope. Great fic, I'm really interested to see where it is going. Cassie and Drew are also main characters, I wonder if you are pairing them up. Should be interesting!

Well Kat, I can say that you achieved what you wanted in this chapter (for me anyway). The thing I love most about this fic is that you develop the characters with such depth. What you did with Jack's character was amazing. The heartbreak over his mother, and his discovery of being 'desirable', it was developed brilliantly. I can see exactly why he would sleep with somebody else as soon as Martha mentioned the 'L' word. It was his instinct, he was trying to protect himself. And despite all the bad rap he gets, it was great to see it come through, especially when he was talking to Kim. I am in love with all the characters (except perhaps Hayley ) and this story. You have just turned something that was so stereotypically soapie (don't get me wrong, I loved it when it was that way!) into a story with so many layers. It was good to see Gypsy break down as well, to realise that what she was doing was destroying herself more than it was others. My heart broke for her when she relieved those memories, maybe because I'm a huge Gypsy and Will fan. I really can't wait to see where you take this. Well done