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Eli

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  1. Thank you! I think I will post the last chapter tonight or tomorrow
  2. Thanks, you guys are making me blush I THINK the next chapter will be the last one... But I won't be able to update tomorrow because I'm going to the Christmas Dance and will probably spend all afternoon getting ready. You know, three girly girls who are best friends, beautiful dresses, mirrors, make up and a dance coming up... It'll take all day to get ready
  3. I just read the entire fic, and I LOVED IT!!! The words you use, the way you describe the situations, how different it's from everything else here (no offence to other writers!) I love all of it! The only suggestion I have for you in future fics is that you don't use names as much as you do (only in some parts of the fic, especiallt part 1 and 2). Try to replace "Tracey" with "she" a bit more often, and the same goes for the other characters. Other than that it's perfect!!
  4. She didn’t care anymore. Not about herself, not about anything. As far as she was concerned, her life ended when Zoe’s did. Great ! You really got me seeing how much she loved her. "Who the hell was that?" Cassie asked as she sat beside Sally and Ric, who both stared on in confusion as screams of terror and pain continued to pierce the air in the background. Very powerful, even though it's kind of a cliché it really has a good effect on the story. "So what did you think you were going to do?" Tracey asked to the silent and dead-like man lied in the bed. "Did you think that once all of this was over that you could live happily with Drew? I’m only asking because you seemed so sure of yourself yesterday." Tracey stood up and cocked her gun and pressed the nuzzle hard against the side of his forehead as a tear streamed down the side of her face. "You’re not going into witness protection, Peter. You’re not even going to make it out of this room. You know what? You’re going to meet the same fate as that stupid f*cker who was driving that van." I love these paragraphs, the conversation/monologue is very lively, and the way you describe the situation makes it easy to picture everything. He did as he was told, a violent tremble shook his entire body as he legs began to give way, he was terrified and could hardly breath. He closed his eyes and panted breathlessly in fear as Zoe walked past him and stood beside Tracey who aimed the gun at his head from a small distance. Tracey pulled the trigger and a small popping sound accompanied the driver’s body as he fell to the ground. A perfect bullet hole in the centre of his head. This is really good, you make them seem so cold and evil, and the situation is very easy to picture. Well written! "I believe we’ve got a wedding to get to." I love the casualty of this sentence, it once again shows how cold they are. All over a VERY good story, I love the words you use and how you describe the situations without using too many words. Can't wait to read more from you!
  5. Thanks I can see what you mean by that, I know I have too many characters, because I forget writing about some of them (like Jason) and they just become someone I mention every once in a while.
  6. Thank you very much, and thank you for recommending my stories! I also read your review from fanfiction.net, and I know what you mean. I realized paragraphs had to be separated by two paragraph spaces instead of one, but I didn't bother to change it because I was mad at the website (I like this one better)
  7. Thank you And thanks for moving it, Skykat!
  8. Thanks
  9. Thank you very much (maybe I should start writing all my fanfics without planning, and with only caffeine keeping me awake ) I don't know how long it will be, but I'm guessing around 5 or 6 chapters. I have an ending, I just need to fill out with some stuff between now and the ending. I was a bit afraid people would think I was emo or something when I wrote the second chapter, so I'm very glad you like it. And no, feel free to hug her as much as you want (I can post a screencap you can hug, even though I must warn you: It might hurt when you hug your screen!)!
  10. Thank you, I don't mind at all! I haven't changed that much about it, just some details really. But details make the story, right And by the way: I have a new chapter of "Where do you go" up in case you want to read it
  11. Thanks
  12. Thank you, Belle
  13. Thank you
  14. As I said in my review in the challenge I loved it! And wasn't this your first time entering the challenge? Very good indeed!
  15. Thank you everyone (*blushes*), not sure when I'll have the next chapter up... probably some time today or tonight, I don't have much to do. But I'm warning you, it could get worse soon, because now I have planned how it's going to end
  16. I know what you mean. I watch the current Australian episodes, but everyone is writing J/M and stalked fanfics (no offence, some of them are really good!!) and I want to write something a bit different. Also Jade is one of my all time favourites, and in my opinion someone you can write a lot about (she could have been so much better if she had been given any good storylines) To get readers you need to have "a name" if you know what I mean, so I'm just hoping that 2007 will be my year And it's a good sign my fanfics have been recommended, (thanks ILM!) I never thought that'd happen! I better go to bed now before I get some crazy idea for a new chapter ending up being a total disaster I really appreciate your reviewing by the way, thanks again
  17. Firstly: Thanks! To be honest I didn't think very much (I'm glad you liked it because it's late and I'm tired, so I was afraid it sucked as I just came up with it) and that's probably why I didn't write who it was about. But when I look back now it might have been a good thing There's actually a reason why it was so short (probably the only thing I thought through about this story ) is that in my previous two fics I have much longer chapters, and I don't have many readers, so I was hoping shorter chapters would get me more readers. And also, I admire the ability (not that I have it) to capture someone with few words. I really want to see if I can get the reader into the story by writing short chapters, describing how she feels. But I agree that this chapter was VERY short, the next ones will be longer than this one, trust me! EDIT: That was a LOT of spelling mistakes
  18. My own Christmas video from last year
  19. Thank you I have been thinking about the dates for the last chapters to be posted, and at the moment I think this is how it's going to be: Chapter 15 - Up December 17th Chapter 16 (Finale!) - Up December 22nd
  20. Thank you very much
  21. Please, I don't mean to be a pain, but I really need a review, because the fic is coming to an end, and I wanna know if it's any good at the moment...
  22. Don't worry, "Closer each day" will pick up pretty much where "The next moves..." left off, and will include the same characters, and continue some of the storylines
  23. Thank you both Right now it looks like there will be two more chapters of this fic
  24. Thanks , updating later this week. (Hopefully)
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