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Hahaha, I use my dreams in writing too. That's where I get most of my ideas from

I had one like that a few weeks ago, Drew... except I was a deatheater fighting Dumbledore's army in Walmart

I liked the cute hug

This ice cream talk has made me hungry...

Oh dear lord, the spam. That was amazing Jem. So moving, powerful... hypnotic, even. I was so captivated I lost complete track of time and moaned aloud when I finished. Wanting More. Ehh, I probably don't make sense, it's been a long day. And it's almost late enough for me to stop drinking.

Thanks, for the link, I'll definitely have a look at it

Aww yay, thanks you two ~~~ Yep, so like I said this will stay a oneshot, it was written with the intention of being one so I think it reads better as one, besides I don't think I could write a follow up chapter to that. Besides, I do not have time for another long fic right now, especially since I've adopted a huge task, see Writer's Assistance Thread. So yeah. But thank you soooo much for your kind comments (They're the best comments I've ever got I think, and it's surprising I was slightly drunk and hungover at the time I wrote it )

Okay, I wasn't sure where to post this seeing as this isn't to do with a HAA fic, but I suppose it doesn't really matter. Okay, I just realized I really suck at description. Right now I'm attempting a new fic, which actually requires more description than dialogue. I don't necessarily hate writing description, but mostly I use dialogue to move my stories forward. Even though this is something I'm doing for fun in my spare time this fic I know I'm taking on something really big, and something I've never attempted. Anyone have any tips, suggestions etc? I can try give a few examples; just reading them over they sound really raw, and I don't know if it's just me being critical or someone needs to teach me how to write Eh, here's one I'm not particularly happy about: And this one, but because I've never gad the urge to drink blood it doesn't surprise me I'm having a hard time getting the longing into my mind Help PLEASE?

Eli, first of all, that was hilarious! Drunk Geoff was awesome! I like the way you included what all the characters were up to, and what was happening with them etc, a nice way to show what changed with them over the few years, I think it's important to do this if you do any sort of time jump in stories, so that the reader isn't left in the dark about everyone, and having people speak about them in conversation is a good way to do this (obviously it's not important if your focusing on one character in particular in a story, but in one where a few characters play roles it is, and I think it's better for the reader, it gives them a great sense of realism and involvement.) Great twist at the end, Geoff This is interesting, I wonder if he's tried it on with him before, or ever confessed feelings for him? Anyway, these are my favourite quotes. Hahaha, that's like me when I'm drunk. I'm known to say four to everything when people ask me how much I've drunk, but I never say four what. It's usually gallons The comments about Aden being lucky to nail such a hot chick were hilarious, and the last line definitely brought the mystery in the middle of a humerous scene. I like that. Update soon please! PS: Something that was said earlier about geoff not wanting to be a minister any more... maybe he's done something that's considered a sin? Or what if he's gay, and that wasn't just a drunken kiss? EDIT: Hey, I told you I owed you a long comment! And I wasn't even trrying! Haha!

LOL Eli. That was hilarious. Loved the Geoff/Aden interaction. I'm still very intrigued. I don't have time for a long review but I owe you one.

Grr. Try number TWO ( Eli knows what I'm talking about ) Okay, great chapter, and great writing again. I'm intrigued as to know what's changed. I wonder if something happened between them all. And I want to know what it is So if Eli can find it in her heart to kindly update soon she's make me very happy My favourite quotes: Uh yeah, that's half the chapter but whatever

Well, I think I am going to leave it as a oneshot, I think it just reads better as one. But I probably will write more Adelle fanfiction, I still have the sequel to WIITY to consider, and I have another one in mind too.

They're gorgeous, Amy! Can't choose a favourite, the recent batches are so awesome

Yeah, and besides, at least I only work weekdays and the hours are about the same as school hours are here so it's not going to be too different from what it was like when I was in school those few years ago

Woopee. Two comments so far. And none said it sucked Well, if I do continue this, updates won't be regular, as I start a new job in a week or so and I'll be knackered. But if I do continue, before I start wrk this fic will have my full attention, as I'm sick as a wolf dog... yes...

Great start, Eli. I love your writing style, it 'flows' really well. You write the characters really believably(is that a word?) and the dialogue works really well too. Anyway, the story sounds really interesting so far, you already have me wanting more

Wow Jen, those are amazing! Your colouring is fantastic.

Yeah, I find reading over is the best tactic. You'll discover the heart of your story and why you wrote it in the first place Okay that sounds soppy, but who cares. Ya know what I mean.

Summer Rose Turner, but I don't think that was before the year 2000...

Ah, the lovely 08's

Of course we're excited, Chris! I love the Credits Centre Well, granted I saw them when they were being put together, but nevertheless, they look great

Ooh Jen, I love the textures and the colouring is really nice and bright and... strong, I suppose, it brings all the colours out without being too full on. And the three picture thing you have going on is good, I like that!