-Jade- Posted August 1, 2006 Report Share Posted August 1, 2006 Ok, well since I'm on a bit of a roll, I thought I'd post the next chapter, to hopefully make up for (just a little bit) how irregular and far apart the updates for this fic have been. Please review because I love reading your comments (good or constructive)! Chapter 16 Realising what she was doing, Martha quickly ran out of the office and to the cark park of the hospital where her car was. She quickly got in, ignoring Rachel's cries. Following closely behind Rachel started talking to her through the car window, as Martha locked all of the car doors. “Martha you need to talk! Tell me why you’re so upset.” said Rachel, desperately trying to get her to open up. Stubbornly, Martha refused to look at her and put her keys in the ignition. As she drove away, Rachel sighed in frustration. Why was she upset over something that was supposed to bring endless happiness? *********************** As Martha drove, she forced her tears to stop. She roughly wiped her cheeks and looked at her watch. Her shift at the Surf Club was in 10 minutes so she knew that she would have to pull herself together. Ten minutes later she walked into the Surf Club after having put on some make up in a bid to cover up the fact that she had been crying. Actually, being at the Surf Club was one of her favorite times. At least there, she could see her grandfather, her family and her friends without the constant company of Chris. Every time she thought of him, anger would boil up inside her. She was angry that he could be so careless. After all, she was the one who would be affected by what she had found out in the long run. He just obviously didn’t care. Then again, she was hardly surprised. Her shift was long and quite boring due to the few people who needed serving. Eventually it hit 7:00 when the drinkers usually really started pouring in and Martha prepared herself for the sudden rush of customers. And as she expected, by 7:30 the club was full. As she crouched down to get herself a cold beer she heard a voice that she dreamed regularly of hearing. “Jack!” she said happily, momentarily forgetting what she had seen earlier that day on the beach. However, as she stood up straight she came face to face with not only Jack, but Alex as well. She smiled politely, but inside she was devastated, it looked like they were already getting serious. “Erm, what can I get you two?” she tried to ask cheerfully, but failed. Alex smiled sympathetically and answered: “Two beers I think.” She said. “Coming up.” replied Martha, as she ducked back underneath the bar to grab two cans from the fridge. She tried to regulate her breathing which was gradually getting more and more laboured. She reasoned that she was probably just too stressed after the day’s event. Having calmed down, she resurfaced and handed the couple their beers and looked wistfully on as they went and sat down. ‘Why can’t that just be me?’ Martha asked herself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ash_mc Posted August 1, 2006 Report Share Posted August 1, 2006 woo! hate chris!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
irishgirl01 Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 This is a brilliant fan fic well done. Cant wait for the next chapter. PS- You joined on my 21st birthday (I thought that was cool. Im sad I know!!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beckyboo Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 OMG this is amaing i have only just read it all but please post more soon!!!!!! ASAP even!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! xxxxx My fave part of this fic so far has got to be:- “ I love you, but you really can be thick sometimes. Of course he’s upset and angry about Martha’s problem! He loves her!” Hehe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bay girl Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 Nooooooooooooooooo. Go away Alex. Why does Martha have to be pregnant? And to that jerk. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jamey-Maria Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 O.k so apart from how fantastic your writing is here are my comments. Chapter One His head was telling him that Alex was definitely the right choice. After all she was attractive, funny, kind and Jack really did like her. Ignore your head FOOL!!! And (even though i knew about the baby) Chapter Two Alex smiled sympathetically and answered Don't feel sympathy for her. Feel it for yourself when you lose Jack because he loves Martha. I don't care how nice she's supposed to be i don't like her! Please update soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack4martha_forever Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 P-p-p-pregnant?!?!?!? She cant be pregnant. OMG im so sad. She has to leave Chris and get together with Jack *cries* Poor Martha. Stupid Jack, get over Alex and help Martha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Annie- Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 Gosh Jack, I could kill you! *slaps Jack's face* Oh gosh, poor Martha! Brilliant writing jackandmartha!!! I loved it! (Oh and thanks for posting two chapters! ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lollipop_lover11 Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 Okay I know I'll sound mean but Martha was the one that pushed Jack away so she should apologise. Sorry if I sound mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jamey-Maria Posted August 2, 2006 Report Share Posted August 2, 2006 ^You don't sound mean but people in domestic violence situations usually push others trying to help away. jackandmartha!!!'s doing a great job writing this story very accuratley. But seeing as we know she stays with Chris because of this secret and yet we don't know what it is......... give us an update where we can find out now! Please!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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