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Right, i'm sorry about this but there is going to be another break until the next chapters come! I have two weeks of exams in a week and lots of coursework to give in so I really won't be able to write any more for a while . However, once my exams are over (in about 3 weeks) I can promise that I will be posting REGULAR chapters for once. lol oo and I just want to say thank you to everyone who has been reading this fic and I really appreciate the comments!

What I would like to know though is....

1) What would you like to happen in this fic?

2) Has anyone got any suspicions about why Chris has got Martha trapped? (Would be interesting to hear your ideas, if anyone gets it right then I will PM them and tell them! Nicole keep your mouth shut! :P)

3) How could I improve the fic?

4) Is it worth continuing?

Ok, well thanks and hopefully I will be up and writing again soon!

jackandmartha!!!

xoxox

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Thanks for letting us know! Hope exams go ok!

1. I would like to see the continuing friendship and tension grow between Martha and Jack, as they both try and suppress their feelings for eachother.

2. Suspicions, well i don't have a clue really, but i'd guess that Chris did something to really help Martha out before they moved, i don't know, maybe like gave her a lot of money, and to pay him back Martha has been forced to marry him.

3. the fic is perfectly written the way it is, i wouldn't want you to change a thing :D

4. Do you even have to ask that question?!?! You have to continue or i might die if i don't know what is going to happen between M&J&C! I'm really hoping that the next 3 weeks go so fast, so that we can have an update :P

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1) i would like to see Martha and Jack get closer, and for Martha to finally leave Chris

2) Hmmm.. i don't really know im thinking the same as linzie_mac01, maybe Chris helped her out before and to repay him she had to get married to him and sta with him

3) The foic is really good, don't change a thing its Fantastic

4) Ogcourse it's worth continmuing can't wait to read more.

Hope you do well on you're exams Good Luck

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Hope you do well with your exams, goodluck (not that you'll need it seeing as you are going to be doing nothing but studying for three weeks. Oh the joy........:P)

1)I would like to see them grow as friends before getting together (because they MUST get together) I want her be able to trust him and open up before they start a relationship. And NO MORE Martha-abusing, it's really sad! (i no you might have to do it to emphasie the problem but i still don't like it!)

2)I have no clue whatsoever, i am totally hopless...............maybe Martha has a really bad, secret past and he is blackmailing her? Or not, lol.

3)How many times must i tell you that your writing skills are superb and you shouldn't change a thing?!

4) If you don't continue i will hunt you down........

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I'm sure we can all relate to the stresses of exams, so please don't apologies for that and I hope they go well!

1) Like many, I would love to see Martha and Jack get close, even have a relationship, but not without a few trials and tribulations (I am still a M+J fan, honest!)

2) As for why Chris has trapped her, maybe he took the blame for something Martha did and in return her deed was to stay with Chris? Or perhaps he witnessed something illegal that Martha did and as a form of blackmail, insists that she stay with him?

3)Your writing and ideas are brilliant as it is, just continue in the same manner!

4) And finally...please, please, please carry on! (Only after your exams though!) lol

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Ok, I know it's been years and years since I last posted lol but I finally got around to writing some more! Sorry that this is sooooo late! Hope you enjoy it! :) Please review - every comment is really appreciated!!

Chapter 9

The whole of breakfast was spent with Chris talking and Martha just occasionally including a subdued nod.

“Hey, you’re quiet this morning,” said Chris “what’s up?” Martha’s head shot up and looked at him in disgust.

“As if you didn’t know.” She said quietly. Chris just sighed as if she was behaving like a tiresome child.

“You know, I’m your fiancé, it’s not like I’m a stranger.” Inside, Martha could feel her anger rising.

“Oh and that makes it ok does it? It makes it ok to force yourself on me. I’m supposed to accept it am I?” Martha cried, her voice getting increasingly louder. “The fact that you’re my fiancé makes no difference! Anyway, you know as well as I do that you forced me into that. If I did actually have a choice here I would not marry you, let alone go out with you even if you were the last man on earth!” she shouted. Immediately after there was silence, Martha knew she had overstepped the line. Christ took a step forward. He looked calm, but Martha knew what was coming. She could see the menace in his eyes. In one swift movement he swung his hand around towards her. His hand and her cheek impacted and Martha stumbled backward, grasping the side of her face as it stung. But he wasn’t finished. Chris again came towards Martha and pushed her, his hands on either of her shoulders. She fell, starting to cry. And then the doorbell rang. Chris swore under his breath. Quickly he took hold of Martha’s arm and pulled her up, shoving her towards their bedroom.

“Stay in here.” He whispered “And don’t make one sound. I mean it Martha, you’ll regret it if you do.” He finished threateningly and with that he closed the door.

Re-composing his face, Chris answered the door, and was not in the least pleased to see Jack.

“What are you doing here Jack?” he asked bluntly.

“I came to see Martha.” replied Jack.

“I’m afraid she’s not in.” Chris smiled fakely at Jack. “You can go now. Don’t worry about coming back.” He said as he gestured towards the door. Jack just looked at him, hating him more with very second that passed. Slowly, he went to leave when he heard a crash that came from somewhere in the house.

“Martha??” he cried out as he walked back into the house. Chris was quick to block his path.

“Erm, excuse me, this is private property, I think you should leave.” He said, pushing Jack backwards.

“Not without Martha.” replied Jack, almost certain that she was there. But Chris kept blocking his way, refusing to let him pass. In frustration, Jack shoved him to the side and headed for the first door he could see. Swinging it open he found Martha curled up on the floor, fearfully looking up at him. The red mark and scratch down her face stood out clearly from her pale skin.

“Oh my god.” said Jack softly, “What has he done to you?”

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Yay! Jack followed his police instincts, now I hope Chris doesnt hurt Jack or Martha again.

Thank you for the update *Big smile* you don't know how pleased I am lol

I love this fanfic can't wait for the next update.

xxx

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OK, I've just began reading this, and oh...my...god. You really put me through the emotional ringer there! lol. I hate Chris so much! How could he do that? What a creep! So glad Jack arrived, lets just hope they see sense. Lock Chris up and get together! LOL. Update soon please. I love it! :D :D :D

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Yay! Jack followed his police instincts, now I hope Chris doesnt hurt Jack or Martha again.

Thank you for the update *Big smile* you don't know how pleased I am lol

I love this fanfic can't wait for the next update.

xxx

What she said, lol. You know i love this fic, brilliant writing. :D

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