linzie_mac01 Posted June 22, 2006 Report Posted June 22, 2006 WOW WOW WOW!!! Excellent, OMG i can't wait. Why leave it there? Please jack and Peter hurry and find Martha before Jeremy realises whats going on. Please, i'm desparate here! :S
Jamey-Maria Posted June 22, 2006 Report Posted June 22, 2006 I just read two chapters and all i can say is OMG! Actually i can say more, lol! Jeremy i hope your enjoying that beer and movie because once Jack opens the door (i'm hoping it's his house) your a gonner............ Why did you leave it there? Please update soon!
MarthaJackFan Posted June 25, 2006 Report Posted June 25, 2006 Fantastico! (God im sounding like Colleen) Keep up the good work:)
jack4martha_forever Posted June 25, 2006 Report Posted June 25, 2006 ahhh...this is good...but plz hurry jack and peter up and make sure martha is aiite...plz
xxtessaxx Posted June 26, 2006 Report Posted June 26, 2006 Haha thanks for all the gr8 comments everyone!!! Here's the next chapter Chapter 13 The house looked empty. Although it was a sunny day the house looked gloomy and unattended. “Are you sure this is the right one?” Jack asked Peter as they hopped out of the car “I think so, we'll have to find out” Peter answered. They knocked on the door. There was no answer. So they tried again. But there was still no answer. “Maybe he's gone out?” Jack suggested. “Yeah, you're right. We'll have to force the door open” Peter answered “You sure?” “Yep, let's go” Jack grabbed a metal pole lying on the ground in the middle of the grass and after a lot of attempts he managed to get the door open. Peter signaled Jack to get behind him. Peter walked in first with Jack not far behind him. They walked around the house, quietly. They searched every room then saw the bathroom. Jeremy was standing next to Martha with a gun pointing in Jack and Peter's direction. Jack gasped, there was blood in the bath tub underneath Martha and she was very pale. She was still unconscious. “Leave her alone” Jack yelled “Wait, Jack, we don't want any trouble” peter said “Yes, Jack... calm down” Jeremy said Jack walked out, pacing up and down the hallway. “Jeremy. Put down the gun” Peter said “Why should I?” “We don't want anybody getting hurt” “All you have to do is come with me and Jack” peter said “...and why would i do that?” “Just put down the gun Jeremy” Jack said “Why would I let it end like this? So I go to jail, Martha and her precious little boy jack live together happily ever after and you both get heroic titles that you saved Martha from some psycho in town?” “I don't think so. It's going to end how I planned it” Jeremy said. Just as he said that a police officer jumped from the window onto Jeremy. Peter grabbed the gun and put handcuffs on Jeremy's hands. “Nice work” Peter said to the police officer. "But how did you know to come?" he asked "Jack gave us a call." they answered "Okay, thats good then. Who knows what could have happened if you hadn't come" Jack ran over to Martha's side. He held her hand. “Martha?” Jack said “Please don't be dead.” he said “Jack, call the ambulance” Peter ordered. Jack grabbed his phone, and dialed 000 and asked for an ambulance to arrive at this house. He also called Tasha. “Hello?” said Tasha “Hey Tasha, it's Jack” he said. “We've found Martha, but she's not in a very good condition” jack explained “That's good you've found her, how bad is it?” Tasha asked “We're not sure, the ambulance has just arrived though. Can you meet us at the hospital?” Jack asked “yeah sure, see you soon” “Bye” Jack said before hanging up. The ambulance guys brought in a stretcher and lifted Martha onto it. “What's her name?” one asked. “It's Martha” Jack said “Martha, Martha... can you hear us?” “Can you meet us at the hospital?” they asked Jack “Yes, I'll be there as soon as i can” Jack said Jack and Peter arrived at the hospital just moments later. Martha was being taken into a special room to be checked. Jack stood there feeling helpless and useless. This was all his fault, if he hadn't believed that stupid Jeremy guy then we wouldn't be in this position. Martha could die and he would never be able to forgive himself. Tasha walked in. “Jack, how is she?” she asked “I'm not sure. They're just checking her now” he said Tasha saw the look on his face. “Hey, it will be okay” she said and gave him a hug. This time he couldn't help the tears from rolling down his cheeks.
aliasangel Posted June 26, 2006 Report Posted June 26, 2006 oh my god update please is martha okay make her okay please
jack4martha_forever Posted June 26, 2006 Report Posted June 26, 2006 yaaaaaay!! jack found martha waaaaa!! martha is in hospital i hope shes aiite...she better be aiite...she was unconcisous for like a day *cries* great fic
Jamey-Maria Posted June 26, 2006 Report Posted June 26, 2006 Aww poor Jack (Although it was practically his fault) At least now that they've found Martha ans sent her to the hospital she can start to recover. Great chapter, please update soon!
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