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Great chapter Nic! :P But I have to say, a few lines made me laugh...

Jack forced a smile, slightly taken aback by the reception. He knew he’d cause a shock, but he didn’t expect this reaction.

lmao, Jacky what did you expect? Everyone thought you were dead you idiot. lol

Martha couldn’t help but kick up a little laugh as she watched him trying to cope with the masses of questions he was being asked.

lol, kick is a rather weird way to put it isn't it. I could just imagine this little man kicking laughs up. :lol:

Their faces grew a small smile, not so wide to look creepy and suspicious, but wide enough to show their happiness.

How would a wide smile look suspicious? lmao.

As always you made me laugh, I especially loved the bit where Colleen said something along the lines of "Wait Madge will be here soon".

Please update ASAP! :D

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Okay.

Imagine if you were just looking at someone, and then they developed this big, massive, whack-off grin at you. You'd be like "Oook, stop looking at me that way.." lol. It would be creepy, right?

You can kick up laughs. Leave me alone. lol. If you were on msn once in a while you'd have been able to proof read it.... :P jk! I love the fact you're never on.

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That was an awesome update.

Honestly; i don't know if i want to find out what Martha's secret is. I just know it's going to hurt our feelings and poor Jack's feelings. Frig you Nicole. LOL.

It's another guy, isn't it? Isn't it Nicole? Pure torture this is; and you know it.

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Great chapter Nicole. How can you not be happy with the near kiss bit? It was written perfectly and has definitely let us readers hanging out for the moment that they do finally have that kiss.

I swear i near choked on my tea when i read the bit where Jack walked into the diner and Colleen threw the plates in the air.... You could just picture her doing that if this happened in the show. And her yelling for him to come back that Madge Wilkins was on her way there... Classic Colleen :D

Can't wait to find out what Martha forgot to tell him... I hope it is something nice like she had his baby and not something about her being in love with some other guy.

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