xsianx Posted February 2, 2007 Report Posted February 2, 2007 Adia - I'm not happy. *Tries not to smile* The J&M moments - were cute! the offer of crying was adorable. The man at the end - that was horrible!
Adia Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 Awww, I know... *comes out of hiding place* Just thinking about the next update...
xsianx Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 In your next chapter you could have -- Jack beats the crap out of that guy. Jack and Martha fluff. Jack strips.... wall paper of course. But I feel abd things are going to happen. Your sending bad vibes Adia.
Tasha Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 And Martha is pregnant Adia dont forget that. Nothing can happen to the bubby. 'Cause if anything does happen, oh you'll be in much bigger trouble Now please update
xsianx Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 You don't want to make an enemy of Tasah
-lolly- Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 Wow i just read the updates, loved them all. I love how Jack is being so supportive to Martha and trying to help her. But that evil guy had better not hurt Martha *begs* please Can't wait for more.
I love music Posted February 3, 2007 Report Posted February 3, 2007 “You got any names to back that up?” Johnny froze for a second. He hadn’t expected Rocco to have been at the station all night, and that cancelled out Nina as well. “Of course he does Detective…” a man said walking up behind Johnny and patting him on the back. “You don’t really think Johnny would do anything bad now, would you?’ “Jake Rogers…” Nathan groaned. “Johnny boy was with me last night,” Jake told him. “We were at a pub just out of Warratah Heights. Can’t remember what it was called. Do you mate?” Johnny shook his head. “Nah…” Jake grinned. “I bet you remember those twins though huh? Maybe that’s what you need Detective?” He scribbled something on a piece of paper. “Ease that tension you got building up… I’ve got one of their numbers here… I’m sure if you gave her a house call… she'd take gooood care of you.” Really well thought out twist to the plot and the writing flows. Same for the second part I've quoted. I could picture the scene below: ...some of the pillows fell of the couch. He got up and started rearranging them properly, that is, until he found the wallet. He rummaged through it, searching for a hint about it’s owner. It didn’t take him long to put two and two together. Someone had a lot of explaining to do. The Martha/Jack scene was nice - great cliffhanger!
beckyboo Posted February 4, 2007 Report Posted February 4, 2007 No he cant do anything to Martha Update soon Great Chapter by the way J/M fluff very cute indeed xxxxxxxx
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