SfanS Posted November 7, 2006 Report Posted November 7, 2006 Layne: Please, please! A) Do your chapter for From my point of view, and B) stop ignoring me on MSN!!! Drew, in answer to your question about jake: Only time will telll....LOL, eventually, maybe....
shen Posted November 7, 2006 Report Posted November 7, 2006 Great chapter!!! Looking forward to the next update
SfanS Posted November 8, 2006 Report Posted November 8, 2006 Next updated... One lost...will they be found? One looking....can they find them? The rest.....have no clue.... Chapter 22: Pressure of being lost "I told you we should have gone the other way" Kim groaned to Scott, crouching down. It was already getting late, and they had no way out. They should just admit it....they were lost. "Look, it's not my damn fault!" Scott grumbled back, pacing back and forth. Kim stood up. "Well, it is coz you were the one who told us to go this way, getting us lost" Kim shot back, taking a step towards him. "So why'd you follow me if you're so smart?" Scott yelled back. They were centimetres apart, both fuming. "It's amazing how quickly men can get angry" Rachel muttered. "Oh, shut up!" Scott snapped at her. "Don't talk to my wife like that!" Kim yelled in Scott's face, pushing him. Scott pushed Kim back, and a fight started. Hayden got up to try and stop the fight. "Hey, guys, just STOP it!" he told them, pushing them apart. "It's not my fault Scott's a big jerk" Kim muttered, loud enough for all to hear. Scott's anger suddenly boiled over, taking a swing at Kim, to miss and hit Hayden instead. Trying to get to sleep, Kit tossed and turned in her sleeping bag. She groaned. It was hard for her to sleep with Hayden missing, and being in the middle of the bush without feeling secure. What if they weren't okay? She'd finally found someone who was perfect for her, yet she had just dodged so many chances of losing him...surely, it couldn't happen again. Hayden Sat on the floor, pressing a hand to his eye, refusing to look at the others. He was secretly crying, it had hurt that much. The others would probably give him a hard time if they saw he was crying, he wasn't always tough like they were. Rachel came over to him, before glaring at Scott, and Hayden let her see his eye, he knew that at least Rachel wouldn't care he was upset. Rachel gasped. Hayden already had a nasty bump and bruise forming. THE NEXT MORNING Kit wriggled out of her sleeping bag, stumbling out of the tent. The smells of breakfast that she inhaled were heavenly, but she was worried about saving enough for the others for when they find them. She was glad to see Robbie hadn't cooked a heap, so they were saving, although they had HEAPS of food. Hayden opened his eyes painfully. He found it hard to open the one where he'd been punched. What angered him more was that Scott hadn't bothered to say sorry, just walked off calling him a wimp. Rachel and Kim let him have it, bit Hayden felt Scott was right. He hadn't even been able to stick up for himself, he had to let Rachel and Kim do it for him. He sighed. He missed Kit. At least Kit would tell him he was being stupid and that he wasn't a wuss, but she wasn't there. Leah tried to talk to Rachel, but she ignored her. Rachel didn't know about Dan and Amanda, and was angry at Leah for "betraying" him like that. "Rach..." Leah said, trying to catch her attention. "NO, Leah, NO! What you did was unfair! For pete's sake, you betrayed Dan, by sleeping with his BROTHER! A random guy is bad, but his own brother is...oh, you just make me sick!" Rachel yelled at her old best friends, a little too loudly. Kim could here her from where he was collecting wood, and he wasn't the only one... Amanda listened carefully, hiding behind the bushes. "Oh My God!" She muttered to herself. It wasn't just her and Dan...it was Leah and Peter too! "Okay, we're all going to have to carry a bit extra, as the others aren't here aswell....God, why didn't they take more stuff!?" Robbie groaned, as the group all packed it up. They all heaved the items along with them, calling out their friend's, wives, and lovers names. No sign of anything, until Tasha screamed. Tasha grabbed hold of her ankle, groaning in pain, as a snake that looked rare and venemous slithered away slowly. "Oh my God, Tash!" Robbie exclaimed, rushing to her side. They lay her down on a sleeping bag, deciding it would be best to put her in a tent, safely for now, quickly setting it up. They also agreed that they couldn't leave her alone for any moment with her like this. Tasha shivered , even under the sleeping bag and blankets. She murmured occasional random words, and groaned every now and then. "We can't go on like this, we can't carry Tash around like this" Kit said.... As Leah walked out of where she had had her fight with Rachel, and Amanda pounced on her. "How DARE you sleep with MY partner! Do you have ANy respect at ALL for other people's relationships!?" Amanda shouted in Leah's face. Of course, Amanda had no right to talk, as she screwed up everyone's relationships, but she needed to cover up any evidence or suspicion of her and Dan. Leah ran off crying, confused by her feelings, depressed by her actions, and scared of what the future could hold... "hey, are you alright?" Kit asked Peter, who had walked off on his own after Tasha had been bitten, to have a bit of thinking time. "Um...no, not really" peter replied, his head down. "You want to talk about it?" Kit asked him, sitting down beside him... "And so....Leah and I spent the night together" peter finished off. "I mean, i feel terrible, doing that with my brothers WIFE, yet....I still feel like it was RIGHT, you know?" kit's mouth hang open, wondering if she should've ever asked, as Dan, like Amanda, his behind the bushes listening.... WARNING: Just figured out how to end it, so it WILL be soon, I think...As I don't really know where to go after this....
shen Posted November 8, 2006 Report Posted November 8, 2006 woo another great chapter!! that it's ending soon though. Can't wait for the next update!
Adia Posted November 8, 2006 Report Posted November 8, 2006 Lol. Amanda in the bushes... that was funny. Awwwww, i love this fic... don't end it too soon!
SfanS Posted November 9, 2006 Report Posted November 9, 2006 Chapter 23:Resiliencea (Or however you spell it, sorry, it's from Hypatias!) Dan gasped.... It was a love, betrayal, and a secretive quadrangle! Leah cried....how was she to choose who she loved? Amanda planned....she needed to steal Dan away from Leah! Peter sighed...he couldn't ignore this much longer A new day began. Tasha was getting worse, and they probably shouldn't have come so far, without tracing their steps, as they were now lost too. Dan needed to confront Peter, but how could he do that without being a hypocrite? Rachel woke up, feeling horrible. Honestly, why did she have to get sick while they were stuck in the middle of the bush, lost? Feeling vomit coming on, she ran out into the bushes... "Pete?" Dan asked. "Ï heard about Leah"... 3 DAYS LATER Rachel, still sick, was still vomiting. Leah had heard about Amanda and Dan's night, and she and Amanda were non-stop fighting. The group was running low on food....how much longer could they survive? Tasha was staying up, she was fighting, but they weren't sure how long they could keep her like this...day by day, they prayed they'd be found, day by day, their wishes didn't come true. At least they had tents, and more food, and matches, etc, while the other group were roughing it. Dan and Peter both now knew about the other one's night with the other one's girlfriend or wife. "Well, at least yours is only a little fling with Amanda, you actually slept with someone who's leagally MARRIED" Dan yelled at Peter angrily. "Well, if she's married, maybe the husbands not treating her right, and needs to go to somone else for sex!"Peter shouted back, immediately regretting it. Dan punched Peter as hard as he could in the face, and once he'd been hit, Peter turned away, in serious pain, running off into the bushes. Rachel lay down on the ground. Being sick like this was horrible. No one knew what was wrong with her, either. She sighed. "Ï'm just going to go and explore a bit, okay? See if I can find the other group?" Kim told the rest of them. Hayden told him he couldn't go alone, so the two of them headed off, promising the others they wouldn't get lost. Robbie sat by Tasha's side, praying she'd be okay. They needed help, they needed help NOW. Kit followed Peter. No one could go out alone, NO ONE. Peter cried, for what he'd done, for how he was feling, and also, because that punch seriously hurt. He needed to yell, to scream...so that's what he did. At the top of his lungs, he yelled, and screamed, letting all the feeling out. Kit covered her ears, God, it was loud. "Did you hear that?" Kim hissed to Hayden. He tried yelling back, as they went towards the noise. "Hello!?" Hayden shouted. Kit immediately recognised the voice, and as well started shouting. "Hayden! Over here!"She shouted, as they found eachother. Kit through her arms around Hayden, hugging him, before hugging Kim as well. THe fact that they were okay made her happy enough. The other group had to move down to where they were set up, they couldn't move everything and Tasha. They were finally all together again, as they all greeted their loved ones, with Rachel throwing up every now and then. Deciding the next day that they needed to find their van, Kim, Hayden, Peter and Scott all set off to explore being careful to trace their steps. "YES!"Kim shouted joyfully, he was sure he could see the van....
Drew Posted November 9, 2006 Report Posted November 9, 2006 Both were great updates. You can't end it too soon. You're just beginning to add more characters in, do stories on them. After all this fic is called "One thing leads to another", meaning that this could go on for ages
shen Posted November 9, 2006 Report Posted November 9, 2006 woo great chapter yet again! Please don't end this...i love it too much lol Anyway, update soon!!
SfanS Posted November 9, 2006 Report Posted November 9, 2006 Well, if you guys wo0uld want it, there would be a sequel. But I might need your help...I have NO ideas right now...I just know how I'm going to end it, which WILL be soon. If you have ideas, just e-mail them to me, or post them here...I have aq couple of ideas, and it will be set aropund a year from where we are now. I need a title, as well. Here's the next chapter. Chapter 24: I'm going to call this one 'stupid' because I tried to wind things up, when there was no point. ignore 'The End' bit, okay? "Okay, we've found the van....now how to we get it to the others?" Hayden asked them "Bring THEM to US" SCott said, as if it was the most obvious thing in the world "If you're going to act all smart about it, then NEWSFLASH! Tash? Hello, she can't walk!" Kim exclaimed Scott rolled his eyes. This could be tough. They obviously couldn't drive through trees, so they'd have to carry Tash, taking it in turns. They prayed this would work. They split the group into fours, 3 for one of the groups, for who wopuld take Tash when. They took it in turns to carry her on the mat, being careful, stopping every so often to change. It seemed like forever, but they FINALLY reached the van.... and drove all the way home, safe and sound. A WEEK LATER Rachel took out the pregnancy test. It was the only explanation for why she'd been so sick. She took the test, praying she was pregnant...this was what she always had wanted. She looked over after waiting two minutes. Postitive. Rachel smiled...wait till she told Kim. Hayden set the table. He changed it. Then changed it back. Then changed it completely. God he was nervous. He moved one of the candles, then changed music, before changing it AGAIN. Kim walked in, and began laughing. "God, Hayd, you really ought to move something and stick with it" he laughed, but Hayden fidgeted. "I know...I'm nervous. You think I've DONE this before!?" he exclaimed. Kim paused for a minute, looking at him strangely..."Wait, you're not...?" Hayden nodded. Kim arrived back home, where Rachel was waiting. "Hey" he greeted her, leaning down to kiss her first. "Hey"she replied, smiling. She didn't take the smile off her face, so Kim knew something was up... Kit arrived at Hayden's, to see it all set up. "Woah...what's all this?" she asked. "Just something special..."Hayden replied, with a mysterious look. "Anyways, dinner..." "You're serious!?" Kim exclaimed, after Rachel had told him her news. KIm wrapped his arms around her happily, this had to be a new start, a sign to finally be happy. At the end of dinner and dessert, Hayden managed to drop the ring, right infront of Kit. Kit couldn't help but laugh at Hayden, it was funny when he was nervous. She was happy though. Seriously, why else would he have a ring? "Do you have to laugh? YOU'RE not the one who's totally nervous about asking a girl to marry him!"he exclaimed. "Really? Who are you asking!?" Kit asked. "Haha...I might as well say it, Will you marry me!?" Hayden exclaimed, pretending to be annoyed. Kit exclaimed "Yes!"Of course...was there really any other answer? For both couples, who both planned a new, happy, future, all could only go up from here....or could it? THE END> Or not.....
Drew Posted November 9, 2006 Report Posted November 9, 2006 The end? Sorry guys? That's the actual end to the story? I thought when you said you have a few ideas you have something big planned You should of had a shooting rampage with Jake and shoot a few people.
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