Adia Posted November 12, 2006 Report Posted November 12, 2006 Yay! A great update. I'm loving this. Can't wait to see more Dan and Amanda!
SfanS Posted November 14, 2006 Report Posted November 14, 2006 Chapter 29: The leadup to the rampage! Suddenly, Rachel's thought were interrupted as she was watching Bianca and Kim, as Lucas rushed in, with a heavily pregnant Lee, who was obviously in labour. They were really going to need Dr. Ridley for this one. Bianca whispered things to KIm occasionally, and Kim's eyes widened. This girl had been through hell, something a lot of people shouldn't have to go through. Her own father had shot her mother, while Bianca herself had still been watching. Her father had been evil, he had bashed her, affecting her in many ways, making her scared of almost everything. Kim asked the young girl to describe him, he was NOT going to get away with hurting such a young girl, KIm wouldn't let him. Telling Kim her father's name was Shane Murdoch, Kim was determined to help Bianca. Lee groaned in pain. "Lee? Can I help with anything, please, Dr., Ridley, let me DO something!"Lucas exclaimed, as he heard Lee groan again. "I just want Dane!" Lee moaned. Dr. Ridley sighed. How annoying. Rachel rushed past Lee's room, stopping for just a moment as Lee went into another contraction. Rachel sighed. That would be her in a month or two. Kim looked up the name on google. Shane Murdoch. He didn't have much of a profile. Every fact had been deleted, no birth date, no wife, or anything. Kim shook his head, and headed down to the station, praying Jack would help him.... "Rach! Your husband, Kim, right? Did he really fix Bianca? Like, is it safe to go in?" Dr. Green asked. He knew what Bianca was capable of, and was worried he would be attacked. "Sure, I think so" Rachel said hopefully. She had faith in Bianca, she knew she would be alright in the end. Dr. Green headed in. 2 minutes later, he ran back out. "She's crazy! She's gone psychoatic again, she attacked me!" he showed them a few scratches and teeth marks. Rachel's eyes widened....so much for making a break through. She needed to call Kim. Leah and Peter on her lounge, snuggled up together. VJ had soccer practice, and Ryan did too, although he didn't even live there anymore...unfortunately, he'd forgotten that, and came tearing through. He didn't know that Dan and Leah were officially not together, and that Peter and Leah were. He was outraged. "How could you DO that!!?? To me, to VJ! To Dad! I HATE YOU!" he screamed at both of them, and ran from the house. And didn't come back. Dan and Amanda had gone up to Amanda's room, finally, so they could save the reporters eyes. Many pictures had already been taken, them actually getting it on wouldn't be the best way for a nosey old lady to start her day, by spitting out her coffee as she saw a criminal and a councellor making love on the criminal's lounge. They could spare the world that, at least. It was bad enough as it was. As Dan's phone rang, he reached over lazily to answer it, still Amanda in his arms, Amanda's fingers drawing little letters, swirls, and pictures on his bare chest, an evil smile on her face, before Dan bolted up as he heard what had happened. Of course, Leah couldn't explain the whole story, as she'd have to tell him that her and Pete were together, although he already knew. God, things were complicated. Kim arrived at the hospital, chocolate ready. He knew it was the way to win Bianca, why couldn't the docs learn that? She was crying hysterically when he walked in. "Hey...remember me?" he whispered quietly to her, as she nodded. "They...they..they try hurt me!" she cried, bursting into tears all over again, wrapping her arms around Kim in a hug. Taken back by her actions, Kim awkardly patter her on the back as she cried. He was surprised she had actually gone as far as touching him at all. Suddenly, a scrunched photo fell from Bianca's hand that she had been hiding. Kim picked it up, and was shocked at the figure who he saw. Ryan had been missing all night, Amanda, Dan, Peter and Leah were all worried sick. Suddenly, a messgae with the phone number blocked appeared on Dan's phone. "If you want your son back, meet me at 24 Lane swarve, at the back, their's a shed. Bring the other three. Don't call the police, you'll be in trouble. I'll know" Dan knew who "the other three"were, and they were quickly on their way. KIm had gone to see Rachel for just a minute, needing to tell her something urgent, but when he came back...Bianca was gone.... Belle and Lucas were exploring the bush, when they had seen a car speed by, with what looked like a little boy tied up in the backseat...he needed help, so they tried to keep up by folowing the white car... WHO'S THE KIDNAPPER? WHO'S IN DANGER? WHO WAS THE FIGURE IN THE PHOTO? WHAT MYSTERIES ARE COMING UP THAT WILL HAVE YOU ON THE EDGE OF YOUR SEAT? Please review!
shen Posted November 14, 2006 Report Posted November 14, 2006 woo! Great chapter! update soon so we can all see what happens
Drew Posted November 14, 2006 Report Posted November 14, 2006 That was good. And confusing, but I get it now Getting exciting Oh, just had an idea. Jake, the kidnaper?
Adia Posted November 14, 2006 Report Posted November 14, 2006 Awesome update. Poor Ryan, he's always getting caught in his parents messes. Post again soon, I can't wait to see what happens!
SfanS Posted November 15, 2006 Report Posted November 15, 2006 The next chapter!: Chapter 30:Dot to Dot If everything was linked... You wouldn't know.... till you got there... that everyone you saw... had been doing something different... and arrived... at the same place....for the same thing.... Almost..... Kim gasped when he saw that Bianca had gone, it wasn't safe enough for her to leave. Amanda, Dan and Leah drove to the shed that they had been invited to...they needed to find their son! Belle and Lucas saw where the car had been parked, and saw a man hurl a young boy, around 11, with blonde hair, out of the car. "Ryan!"Belle gasped. She needed to save her half brother, and ran towards the shed. Lucas caught her arm. "Look, you don't need to be in danger too, okay? It'll make it worse. We need a plan, THEN we help Ryan, got it?" he whispered to her, and Belle nodded. RAchel and KIm organised people they knew to help them look. Martha, Kit, Hayden, Tasha, Robbie, everyone, and Beth and Irene had volunteered to mind all of the kids. As Kim and Rachel headed off on their track, Kim jumped when he saw a small footprint...the size of a childs...Biancas. About to put their plan into action, Belle and Lucas sat behind a bush. They weren't very well covered, but they doubted that anyone would come out of the shed at that moment. They were wrong. The rusted door of the ugly shed swung open, as the kidnapped stepped out. A cockroach crawled slowly onto Belle's hand, and she jumped suddenly when she realised. This resulted in both her and Lucas falling out on the floor. The kidnapper turned his head at the sound of the rustle, and headed slowly towards them until he reached them, grabbing them both, pulling them into the shed. Arriving, The four of them jumped out of their car. Dan, full of anger and fear for Ryan, slammed his door shut loudly, and stormed into the shed. He had no idea about what this guy was capable. The others slowly followed, Amanda was the last one in, her eyes widening when she saw someone she recognised, besides Belle, Lucas and Ryan....and old flame....The kidnapper. Bianca ran and ran, passing trees that scratched her as she ran, and drops of blood came out occasionally, but she didn't care. The wounds that had been on her arms and head were scratched open a litttle bit, causing more blood. Wincing in pain, she didn't stop. She didn't care how much he hurt her, she knew she needed to be there. Going by memory, she found her own way to the rusted old shed she had been hit and bashed in, been locked in, and had escaped from. Banging on it with her palm after realising it was locked, the kidnapper took a peek out, saw who it was, and pulled her in as well. Kim stoppped suddenly, peering at the ground. Blood. Following the tiny blood trail, he paused when he reached a dead end, until he saw something....a shed! Taking their chances that Bianca could be in there, Kim didn't bother to knock, as it had been left unlocked, and presumed that there was no one in there but a frightened little girl. Sure, she was in there, but so were 8 other people. They made ten as the door was shut and locked behind them, and they were thrust onto the floor. They were surrounded by darkness, and could hardly make out anything, until they could just manage to figure out that there was: Bianca, who Kim hugged when he saw her immediately, Belle, Lucas, Leah, Amanda, Dan, Peter, Ryan and...."Jake!" RAchel gasped as she saw the last figure... Next time: Who's life is at risk? What is the other link to everyone there? Will Rachel go into labour? And more.... Please review!
shen Posted November 15, 2006 Report Posted November 15, 2006 great chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next!!! Update soon!!!
Drew Posted November 15, 2006 Report Posted November 15, 2006 There's too many twists it's hard to keep up I love how your crossing the storylines over each other good job!
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