Sarah_Lewis Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 StewartFan (I think) Sorry its taking me so long to finish your fic on TT and Eve !! Quote
~Rosey~ Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 I think I dont know what your talking about Who wants to make me a fic. My Rachie and Kim. Roamnce. No problems (unlike home and away) and lots of happyness Quote
emmasi Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 what kind of a plot has no problems? or do you just mean no *serious* problems? Quote
Sarah_Lewis Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 Here's what i got so far !! Probably crap lol: “Rachel where are you?” Kim yelled out, Rachel replied “I’m in here, Tasha came over before and asked if I’d look after baby Ella” Kim said “why what’s she doing?” Rachel replied happily “she had to go to the city, Josie wanted her for something “ Kim said “oh ok!” Rachel replied “you don’t sound very happy with it” Kim said walking into the room “No no I’m ok with it I was just asking!” Rachel picked up Baby Ella and gave her to Kim, she replied “she’s so cute isn’t she Kim!” Kim said with a smile on his face “yeah she is she looks just like her Mum!” Rachel replied “I wish we could have one of our own!” Kim said “Hey we’ve talked about that babe we can adopt” Rachel replied “but its not the same I want one of our own!” Quote
emmasi Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 (edited) Can I make a formatting suggestion?: “Rachel, where are you?” Kim yelled out. “I’m in here," Rachel replied. "Tasha came over before and asked if I’d look after baby Ella.” “Why, what’s she doing?” Kim asked. “She had to go to the city," Rachel replied happily. "Josie wanted her for something “ “Oh ok.” “You don’t sound very happy with it.” “No no," Kim said walking into the room, "I’m ok with it, I was just asking!” Rachel picked up Baby Ella and gave her to Kim. “She’s so cute, isn’t she Kim?” “Yeah, she is," Kim said with a smile on his face. "She looks just like her Mum.” “I wish we could have one of our own!” “Hey we’ve talked about that babe, we can adopt” “But its not the same," Rachel replied. "I want one of our own!” You should start a new line when someone new starts talking, and the "he said, she said" stuff normally goes at the end or in the middle of what is being said. When it's in the middle of the dialogue, you can work out where it's meant to go by reading it out loud, and where you take a break, like at the end of the first sentence, that's where you put the "she said." This sort of stuff just makes things easier to read, otherwise it can get a bit confusing as to who's saying what. It sounds like a good start. Edited November 22, 2006 by emmasi Quote
Sarah_Lewis Posted November 22, 2006 Report Posted November 22, 2006 Can i send the fic to you when im done and could you please fix it and send it back ? Quote
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