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I just read the entire fic, and I LOVED IT!!!

The words you use, the way you describe the situations, how different it's from everything else here (no offence to other writers!) I love all of it!

The only suggestion I have for you in future fics is that you don't use names as much as you do (only in some parts of the fic, especiallt part 1 and 2).

Try to replace "Tracey" with "she" a bit more often, and the same goes for the other characters. Other than that it's perfect!! :D

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