Charlie McKinnon/Matt Levett

[Perry]

If that was aimed at me then here's the main outline;

The fouth body of a group of missing women turn up, the police think there's a serial killer on the loose as they all disappeared after frequenting the same club, but it's a group of corrupt lawyers making snuff films for their billionaire clients. It's very dark.

Sounds like my kind of story cant wait.

[Perry]

Because I was so inspired by emmasi's artwork I made a Charlie one myself using photoshop only stupid photobucket isn't working and I can't upload it... So I uploaded into myspace so if you got myspace have a look at it

here: Charlie drawing! Isn't art fun?

[emmasi]

Oh I don't have it

[Oxidizer]

ZOMG! You guys are right little artists aint yah? That's awesome dude.

All I can draw is a stick man.

[Cerise]

That makes two of us Andy. And as for Paint.... *shudders*

[emmasi]

I can't see it! *cries*

I bet it's awesome too

[Perry]

Sorry Photobucket is still not working for me... I bet it's my internet its going slow... Oh well sorry Jem, if its any constulation (Sorry got confused with the stars- Past my bedtime) Your ones are better.

[Oxidizer]

Hey guys!

Going off topic a lot, I just thought I'd humour you (and myself as I'm really bored) with a short teaser to Just Defy (that story I'm writing), it's in spoiler tags as its nothing to do with Charlie;

Rain fell lightly, rippling the puddles which reflected the blue and red flashes of police cars from afar."What have you got for me?" Senior Detective Tanya Erricson asked.

"23 years of age. Eva Knox. Fully clothed, no immediate signs of a struggle or sexual assault, cause of death, as far as we can tell at this time, is a single gunshot wound to the left temple." The forensic investigator informed her.

"And how did you know the victim's identity?" Detective Aaron Jensen interrupted. Tanya turned to face him before resuming focus on the drenched and broken body of the women laid on the damp concrete of the docks before them.

The forensic analyst looked up at the man in his early 20s dressed in a sharp suit. "Because her membership card to that club, Contagion, was in her pocket."

Aaron and Tanya both looked at each other with deepest concern in unison.

... So what'd you think?

And now going back on topic, I wanna snuggle with Charlie.

[emmasi]

Sounds good . If I'm going to get critical... I might just say, some of the sentences run over a bit. (I know, I can't talk. My sentences go on forever ). Or maybe just change a word here and there. I personally think these would read better, for example:

Rain fell lightly, rippling the puddles that reflected the red and blue flashes of police cars from afar.

^^That's a gorgeous description, by the way.

"Eva Knox, 23 years of age," the forensic investigator informed her. "Fully clothed. No immediate signs of a struggle or sexual assault. Cause of death, as far as we can tell at this time, is a single gunshot wound to the left temple."

Aaron and Tanya looked at each other with deepest concern.

^^I don't know, you might want to add an extra sentence there to give a clue as to why they're concerned.

Don't mind me, I just like picking over other people's fics so I don't have to do it to my own

This has nothing to do with anything, but does it annoy anyone else that the cops always make a point of saying "no sign of sexual assault" when a woman is found murdered? Do they do the same for guys? It just feels offensive somehow that the first thought when a woman dies is that someone wanted sex from her. Chicks can just plain **** people off too, ya know

Sorry, nothing against your fic Andy. It's quite a realistic statement to have in there

[Perry]

Well done sounds good. Now going back on topic, I emailed Channel 7 asking for a little info on Matt Levett and also wheather we can write to him using the home and away address... I bet if there is a response it will be sorry no info and no you can't write to him using that address, but I thought I might ask anyways.