Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 Sweet! LMAO! "Duuude! What is that foulness?!" Wentworth Miller cracks me up in that clip. I love Buffy, maybe we should write a Buffy/ Home and Away cross over
Oxidizer Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 I'm working on a Fic aswell... Not sure about it thoughWhy she killed her grandparents? What she and Sarah talked about? How she met Tracey? I'm sure you can think of something. I love Buffy, maybe we should write a Buffy/ Home and Away cross over Same here. I've only recently gotten back into it. I prefer Angel though, it's more... darker.
Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 i like Buffy better, Angel is good also they're different... I had a crush on Doyle I was upset when he died on the show and then I was even more upset when Glenn died for real
Oxidizer Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 I like Dolye/Glenn too! Guys with dark hair and green eyes do it for me. Everytime.
Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 I like Dolye/Glenn too! Guys with dark hair and green eyes do it for me. Everytime. Yep, with you there!
Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 Please Help, Andy, Jem whoever I need help with my first paragraph i need to word it better but I dont know how: Ring ring… Inside the home the phone was ringing… Brady Ritchie, a 17-year-old boy- a very handsome 17-year-old boy is outside… Outside the home, the sunlight is fading into darkness… Brady is wearing his school uniform for Seabury Hills High. “Hold on I’m coming!” he tells his phone as he rushes to the door. He goes to put his key in the hole… But notices the door slightly ajar… he pushes the door open and looks inside…
Oxidizer Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 Very ominous! I like it. I'm not very good when it comes to writing stuff in present tense (ie. 'He opens the door', I usually use past tense, 'He opened the door' etc), but I'll give it a shot. RING, RING. Inside the home the phone rang. Brady Ritchie, a 17-year-old boy - a very handsome 17-year-old boy - was outside. Outside the home, the sunlight faded into darkness. Brady was wearing his school uniform from Seabury Hills High. "Hold on, I'm coming!" He answered the phone as he rushed towards the door. He went to put the key in the lock, but noticed the door slightly was ajar, he pushed it open and looked inside... Not sure if that helped at all (probabably not ), but I did the best I could. Jem's way better at this kind of thing than I am.
Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 Very ominous! I like it. I'm not very good when it comes to writing stuff in present tense (ie. 'He opens the door', I usually use past tense, 'He opened the door' etc), but I'll give it a shot. RING, RING. Inside the home the phone rang. Brady Ritchie, a 17-year-old boy - a very handsome 17-year-old boy - was outside. Outside the home, the sunlight faded into darkness. Brady was wearing his school uniform from Seabury Hills High. "Hold on, I'm coming!" He his phone as he rushed towards the door. He went to put the key in the lock, but noticed the door slightly was ajar, he pushed it open and looked inside... Not sure if that helped at all (probabably not ), but I did the best I could. Jem's way better at this kind of thing than I am. That sounds better thanks, is it better when writing to write in past tense? whats the difference? sorry I didn't know i was writing in present tense until Jem picked up on it yesterday.
Oxidizer Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 I suck at explaining things so bear with me; Where you use words like opens, walks, and rings etc. change it to, opened, walked and rang. I dunno whether its just me but I find it easier to picture in my head/read that way. And when you finish sentences etc, instead of using 'he replied/she said' at the end of most lines, just put a small two-four word descriptive sentence in between, like.. "I'm going to go over there." She said. "OK." He replied. insteads, change that kind of stuff to.. "I'm going to go over there." She looked over at the park which stood a few feet away. "OK." I hope I'm not being confusion. Did I mention I suck at explaining things? I hope I didn't sound picky either, I wasn't. I was trying to give examples etc.
Perry Posted February 17, 2007 Report Posted February 17, 2007 No, not at all! you're helping... It's good... I'll go through it all tomorrow and fix it all up. I am going to bed cos I got to work tomorrow, early again... Goodnight mate and thanks for your help.
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