Skykat Posted October 31, 2006 Author Report Posted October 31, 2006 What's the secret? Rhys can't kill Kane, he didn't do anything wrong! This story is heartbreaking because you can really see everything from everyone's point of view. i love reading your old stuff ILM.xx Quote
I love music Posted October 31, 2006 Report Posted October 31, 2006 What's the secret? Rhys can't kill Kane, he didn't do anything wrong! This story is heartbreaking because you can really see everything from everyone's point of view. i love reading your old stuff ILM.xx Actually, unless anyone's read this story before, there is NO WAY they'll guess the secret. Eli, I keep asking (well, to be more accurate, driving people crazy) on the "Sally" thread, that's how I get to know Australian expressions etc. Quote
Sunny Girl Posted November 1, 2006 Report Posted November 1, 2006 Did you have this up on fanfiction.net? I don't know why, it just seems a little familar! I'm still loving it though ILM ... Quote
I love music Posted November 1, 2006 Report Posted November 1, 2006 Did you have this up on fanfiction.net? I don't know why, it just seems a little familar! I'm still loving it though ILM ... Damn you, you know the secret then... Quote
Eli Posted November 1, 2006 Report Posted November 1, 2006 What's the secret? Rhys can't kill Kane, he didn't do anything wrong! This story is heartbreaking because you can really see everything from everyone's point of view. i love reading your old stuff ILM.xx Actually, unless anyone's read this story before, there is NO WAY they'll guess the secret. Eli, I keep asking (well, to be more accurate, driving people crazy) on the "Sally" thread, that's how I get to know Australian expressions etc. And you have a much better English than me in general because you're lucky enough to have it as your mother tongue Quote
Skykat Posted November 2, 2006 Author Report Posted November 2, 2006 Oooh who's the stalker? Seb? Leave Kane alone. Loved Kirsty in this chapter ILM, another great update.xx Quote
Eli Posted November 3, 2006 Report Posted November 3, 2006 I'm addicted to this fic! Really good chapter! Quote
Eli Posted November 4, 2006 Report Posted November 4, 2006 Not less addicted after chapter 7, this is great! Going to the Sutherlands these days was like walking a minefield. I loved that sentence^ I have some critisism too (I don't think I spelled it right, but you know what I mean): In the last chapter I think you went fromone timeto another (I'm not sure if that's the termyou use, what I mean is that you for example changed from was to is, said to says and then back again) It can be confusing if you'renot aware that it's a mistake. Other than that, really great!! Quote
I love music Posted November 4, 2006 Report Posted November 4, 2006 Not less addicted after chapter 7, this is great! Going to the Sutherlands these days was like walking a minefield. I loved that sentence^ I have some critisism too (I don't think I spelled it right, but you know what I mean): In the last chapter I think you went fromone timeto another (I'm not sure if that's the termyou use, what I mean is that you for example changed from was to is, said to says and then back again) It can be confusing if you'renot aware that it's a mistake. Other than that, really great!! No, it's not a mistake. It's meant to be in the present tense (one time to another) in those scenes because I think putting them in the present makes them more emotional. But I was being lazy and should have put those scense in italics (it's just formatting anything on here takes so long!) . I've edited to put italics in now. Thanks for your review. I'm looking forward to the next update of your fics. ps Your English is really, really good! Quote
Eli Posted November 4, 2006 Report Posted November 4, 2006 Thank you! I guess I get a lot of practice, because I do 90% of my writing in English It made a lot more sense when you said it should be an italic font, I found it weird when I read it, because from what I've ready from you before I didn't think you'd make a mistake like that. And you didn't after all The present tense... the past tense... I feel really stupid right now, cause I know them so well, and still I wrote "from one time to another" lol Quote
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