allibaz91 Posted April 6, 2007 Report Posted April 6, 2007 Okay, spam much guys?!?! Several points to make: 1) Love the update!! 2) Zoe/Pete interaction was brilliantly written, Chrissie - no need to worry about that! 3) Lacking in Clete, but made up for by the cuteness of Pete "fidgeting" and all 4) Shan, I think you've hit your head and 5) More ASAP!! :D
swfc Posted April 7, 2007 Report Posted April 7, 2007 Thanks heaps Shannon and Ali. Teasers: “No, she reminds me of someone. I just can’t think of whom.” “Are you sure she wasn’t one of your lovers?” Clare teased. “Oh really, for your information, I only dig blondes.” Yet, a part of her was worried. She needed them to exact her revenge plans. For once, Eve was afraid that maybe she had gone too far. That what she had done in order to exact revenge for her dead lover could have killed her friends. ‘Did I go too far this time?’ she wondered to herself. Have fun and Happy Easter you guys.
Oxidizer Posted April 7, 2007 Report Posted April 7, 2007 EEE!! Teasers! Both of which I loved! Can't wait for the full version!
allibaz91 Posted April 7, 2007 Report Posted April 7, 2007 ^ Teasers!!!!!!!!!! Pete only digs blondes - ! Cracked me right up, Chrissie Eve having doubts? Unusual, but I loves it! Now give us the rest of the chapter in teaser form and we'll piece it together
swfc Posted April 9, 2007 Report Posted April 9, 2007 Pete only digs blondes - ! Cracked me right up, Chrissie Clete all the way.... Now give us the rest of the chapter in teaser form and we'll piece it together I can do even better. Here's the full chapter and a long one at that. So, make the most of it. Chapter 4 “You and Ms. Trood over there seemed to be having a wonderful conversation, Pete.” Clare said. “There’s something about her....” he trailed “That reminds you about past lovers?” Murphy joked. Peter’s only response was to look at him in a mock shock expression. This earned a laugh from all three of them. “No, she reminds me of someone. I just can’t think of whom.” “Are you sure she wasn’t one of your lovers?” Clare teased. “Oh really, for your information, I only dig blondes.” “Really, now? What about your sister-in-law, then? If memory serves, she’s a brunette, not blonde. And of course, there’s Tracey.” “That was before I met you,” he replied pulling her into an embrace. “All right, all right. I get the hint. I know when I’m not wanted.” Murphy laughed as he left the lovebirds to themselves. “See you tomorrow morning, boss.” “Yup. And don’t be late, you two!” he replied, shaking his head. As soon as Murphy left, however, things got a bit serious between Peter and Clare. [A/N: I wonder what those two got up to ] Clare looked at Peter. He had a grave expression on his face. She knew that it had something to do with her remark about Tracey. Mentioning Tracey brought up old wounds that they had managed to put behind them. The mere thought of nearly losing him made her all the more scared. Truth be told, she had managed to keep the insecurities at bay but they tended to try their luck at escaping every now and then. “Was it something I said?” “Huh?” Peter gave her a blank stare. “The look on your face. You suddenly got all serious when Murphy left. Was it because I mentioned Tracey and how she was your ex? “No. No. It’s not that. I just can’t seem to get Ms. Trood out of my mind. There’s something about her.” “Well, I certainly hope you figure it out or else neither of us will be able to sleep tonight. That is, of course, you’re planning on sleeping.” “Of course. Come on, it’s late. Let’s go. I don’t want to be yelled at by Murphy for turning up late tomorrow. You know how he is with punctuality.” Clare rolled her eyes and said, “Oh yeah. I still remember the time you came in late and got a lecture on what it means to be punctual.” “Don’t remind me.” “As I recall, I think you were hungover as well.” “Oh yeah. And he knew. So he made me stand in his office for over and hour and lectured about what his father did to him when he was late once. I swear, the bloody speech has been ingrained in my brain until now.” “Something tells me you’re never going to forget it, aren’t you?” “Nope.... Remind me to use that speech for when we have kids and when we need to teach them about being on time.” Clare’s response was to playfully smack him on the arm as they headed towards the exit and went home for the night, both hoping that Tracey and Rachel would wake up soon. Meanwhile, back in Room 439: Maxine Trood was walking up and down the room very slowly. She was too preoccupied with her thoughts that she didn’t hear the Armstrongs leave the room. A part of her was giddy with the fact that her arch nemesis could not recognize her. Heck, he really thought that she was dead. That was the fun part. If she had managed to trick Detective Baker as well as partner/girlfriend, which means that she would be able to carry on her revenge plans against the people of Summer Bay. ‘If blondie and blondette there couldn’t figure out who I was, then.... Unless, Tracey and Rachel woke up and told them I was alive. I need to do something. But, what?!’ she was restless. She had no idea if what she had done had killed her best friends or had she just temporary gotten them out of the way so that they couldn’t tell Peter Baker that she, Eve Jacobsen was still alive. Yet, a part of her was worried. She needed them to exact her revenge plans. For once, Eve was afraid that maybe she had gone too far. That what she had done in order to exact revenge for her dead lover could have killed her friends. ‘Did I go too far this time?’ she wondered to herself. “They just assumed that the first body they found was mine. I’ve always said that the cops at Summer Bay are a useless bunch. Proved me right really, seeing as that they couldn’t even solve the mystery of who the Summer Bay Stalker was. But, I knew that it wasn’t that easy to kill me off. There was no way that I would die before finishing off Sarah’s revenge. She walked towards Rachel and Tracey and knelt down in front of them, and said, "And that’s where the both of you come in. you’re going to help me with my plans to finish off the Bay,” she declared, whilst glaring at them menacingly. She walked out of the barn where she held her friends captive. She needed to send a message across to them. To let them know what she was capable of. To let them know what she would do to them. If they didn’t help her, she had no choice but to dispose of them. They were the only ones who knew she was alive. And she couldn’t let them loose in the world knowing that they could destroy her very existence in a lightning snap. She had to do something. Whatever it was, she had to do it fast. Preview: What Eve did to her friends to cause them the accident. Will Tracey and Rachel wake up? Will Peter figure out that Eve is alive?
Oxidizer Posted April 9, 2007 Report Posted April 9, 2007 Blondie & Blondette. That... was AWESOME! I totally loved it! And I can't wait to find out what happened to Tracey and Rachel. Wow.
allibaz91 Posted April 9, 2007 Report Posted April 9, 2007 Duuuuuuuuude! Clete No idea what they got up to Have to agree, blondie and blondette cracked me right up!! Whole thing was stupendously fantabulously incredible! I thought it was written really well, the dialogue was great; it had humour and emotion and just about everything! Can't wait to find out if Tracey and Rachel are okay. OMG Pete's expression if/when he figures it out ...... More soon!
Oxidizer Posted April 17, 2007 Report Posted April 17, 2007 Chrissie! When are we going to get another update? I waaaan't more Retri NOW! Seriously, take your time, but I am gagging though.
swfc Posted April 19, 2007 Report Posted April 19, 2007 ^ Lol, sorry, I've been busy working and doing my assignments. I am writing the next chapter at the moment. Meantime, here's a teaser: She knew that they would need some convincing so, like a human possessed by something, in her case, the ghost of Sarah Lewis, she did the unthinkable. She got into the car and drove to a nearby shop. At the shop, she bought the supplies she needed to get her friends to co-operate. They were going to help her whether they liked it or not. ETA: More teasers- “Great! You’re giving up?!? Rachel, we need to get out of here and out of this mess and tell someone that she’s still alive!” “You’re really going to turn her in?” “Yes! No! I don’t know... I mean, she’s our friend, Rach!” “I know. But, she’s not the same Eve that we grew up with, Trace. She’s changed. She’s been consumed. Consumed by revenge for Sarah Lewis.” “So, what are we going to do?” “I really don’t know, Rach. I really don’t...”
allibaz91 Posted April 19, 2007 Report Posted April 19, 2007 Teasers What's she up to now? Lol they should turn her in, and then blondie and blondette can go on a wild goose chase Just for the sheer banter! Anyway, awesome teasers - more soon!
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