ilovekateritchie Posted June 11, 2007 Report Posted June 11, 2007 I do! (With Brally with Brally lol) I want to know what happens. LOL at Mark - "I'm just so sad"
Reo Posted June 11, 2007 Report Posted June 11, 2007 I havent commented in a while,but I have been reading Great chapters,glad Mark is finally rid of him..But I bet it is Jen that first figures out Mark was there.
Guest [x]whacko[x]jen[x] Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 Are you suggesting I will be in the next chapter? Oooooh! Great update as usual, more soon!
Roccoluver Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 The first bit is Kylies fault and second bit is Reo fault and there is no Brally yet, Im still working out where to put Mark, one of five places “I have a place to stay, here” Mark exclaimed, frowning at the officer, the officer followed his arms again and mirrored his frown. “Your dad has just died..” “So, people die all the time” “It’s a crime scene..” “I won’t disturb anything, I’ll make you guys coffee” “I think you need a counselor” “I don’t want a counselor, I want to sleep in my room in my house!” Mark bit his tongue, so much for remain cool. “Look, I’m sorry, I’m just..” “Sad?” the officer offered, with a false smile. “Yeah”. The officer looked over at the crime scene “And besides if there’s too many eyes here heaven knows what unwanted evidence might turn up” Jen came running up the footpath, gasping for air she leaned on Mark. “What… what happened?” “My dad died?” Mark said, quickly wiping the smile off his face. “Oh my that’s…” Jen paused as she looked at the officer. “Sad?” Mark and the officer offered. Jen frowned puzzled “Yeah, sad” “I could stay with Jen” Mark said. “Yeah, hey what, oh yeah” Jen said, nodding randomly. “Good, go” The officer ordered. “So what happened?” Jen asked as they walked down the street to the diner. “What, nothing happened” “Your dad died” “Are you implying I know something?” “No, you are” Mark grimaced “I got to go” “Where?” “Somewhere” Sorry, Jen, made next update will have your na..... Brad
ilovekateritchie Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 Oh my that’s…” Jen paused as she looked at the officer. “Sad?” Mark and the officer offered. HAHAHA! That was SO funny! HAHAHA! Update soon!
Roccoluver Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 Oh my that’s…” Jen paused as she looked at the officer. “Sad?” Mark and the officer offered. HAHAHA! That was SO funny! HAHAHA! Update soon! Thanks
Reo Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 “My dad died?” Mark said, quickly wiping the smile off his face. “Oh my that’s…” Jen paused as she looked at the officer. “Sad?” Mark and the officer offered. Jen frowned puzzled “Yeah, sad” Thats just..so full..of emotion..
Roccoluver Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 “My dad died?” Mark said, quickly wiping the smile off his face. “Oh my that’s…” Jen paused as she looked at the officer. “Sad?” Mark and the officer offered. Jen frowned puzzled “Yeah, sad” Thats just..so full..of emotion.. Oh yes, it was a powerful and moving bit to write
Roccoluver Posted June 12, 2007 Report Posted June 12, 2007 Made me cry.. Well Dom was well loved by all
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