bttb-rox! Posted June 8, 2007 Report Posted June 8, 2007 Thanks, Roccoluver and Becky for your comments! Martha will realize her ring is missing...eventually! I've got a slight teaser for you : Jack is soon to be a bit of a hero....
Roccoluver Posted June 9, 2007 Report Posted June 9, 2007 Thanks Roccoluver and Becky for your comments!! Martha will realize her ring is missing....eventually! I've got a slight teaser for you ....Jack is soon to be a bit of a hero.... Would it be in bad taste if I said "And she's not even Blonde" ?
beckyboo Posted June 9, 2007 Report Posted June 9, 2007 Would it be in bad taste if I said "And she's not even Blonde" ? I wanted to say that but I didt want to disresepct blondes
bttb-rox! Posted June 9, 2007 Report Posted June 9, 2007 I promise Martha will realize her ring is not on her finger...just not in this part . Chapter 7 INT. THE SUMMER BAY CARAVAN PARK HOUSE - NIGHT Brad is still reading the note "I'm sorry, but I had to go. I will be back. Thankyou for everything". Brad: What, he's just left?! Sally: Yeah, it’s all my fault. Ric: Sal, it is not your fault. Cassie: Yeah, Ric’s right, you can’t go blaming yourself for what Ollie does. It’s up to him to make his own decisions...right or wrong. Sally: I still feel I’m responsible. Brad: He'll probably be back tomorrow. Maybe he’ll realise that this is his home, and that we are there for him. Sally: You don’t think his gone to find his mother? Brad: I doubt it, Sal. He seemed pretty confused before and he said that he wanted to wait and see. Ric: Which is exactly what we need to do in this situation. Brad: Yes, which is why we just need to stay calm. Ollie isn’t a kid. He can look after himself. Sally: Yeah, I guess. INT. OUTSIDE HANNAHS HOUSE – NIGHT The house is like a hut. It's mostly made out of wood. Hannah: Well here we are. They all get out of the car. Hannah opens up the boot and starts carrying the bags to the door. Nicholas: Can you play game boy with me? Ollie: Ermm, maybe. Hannah: Nicholas, maybe Ollie will play game boy with you tomorrow. It’s very late. Nicholas: Oh. Ollie: Yeah, maybe I’ll play a game with you tomorrow, Nicholas. Nicholas: Yes! Nicholas runs in the house Hannah: Sorry about him. Ollie: Oh, don’t worry. I was a bit like that when I was little. Hannah: So, do you have any brothers or sisters? Ollie: No. I’m an only child. Hannah: I bet your mum and dad made extra fuss of you, then. Ollie nods unsurely Ollie: I should probably take this inside... Hannah: …Yeah, sure. I’ll introduce you to the rest of the family. Ollie: Cool. They head inside the house INT. THE SURF CLUB – NIGHT. Rachel: Oh, it's getting late. We should probably head off soon. Jack: Yeah. We’ve got more wedding planning to do as well. Martha: We? I think you mean you, Jack. Jack: I thought you liked picking colours and choosing dresses. Martha: I do. Just not at this time of night! Jack: You know what? I agree. Let’s leave it until the morning. They all laugh Kim: I’m ready to go now. How about you guys? Martha: Yeah, fine by me. I’ll just pick up the plans and stuff back at your house. I’ll show you them another time. Rachel: I look forward to it. Kim, Rachel, Jack and Martha walk out of the surf club and head back to the bachelor pad to pick up the wedding plans. INT. THE SUMMER BAY CARAVAN PARK HOUSE - NIGHT Cassie: Well, I’m going to bed. Wake me up if you hear anything about Ollie, okay? Sally: We will do. Don’t worry. Brad: Night. Ric: Night, Cass. Cassie goes upstairs Brad: If we hear anything at all that is. Sally: You where the one saying that he would be back tomorrow and now you’re being the negative one! Brad: Sal! Sally: No. I’m sick of you saying something to me, me believing it, and then you going and doing another. Brad: Sally, wait. Sally runs upstairs Ric: Don’t worry. EXT. THE BACHELOR PAD – NIGHT. Kim, Rachel, Jack and Martha are walking up to the house. The smoke ad flames are barely visible from where they are now, but they soon will be. Martha: Don’t you think it’s bit late to be having a barbeque? Jack: It’s probably just some late night party. Rachel: A barbie….that’s what we're doing next. Martha: Well, as long as it’s not for our wedding. I was thinking a little more…buffet. They all laugh…until they see the flames. Kim: That’s not a barbeque, guys! They all run towards the house.
Roccoluver Posted June 10, 2007 Report Posted June 10, 2007 Someone called the fire engine Great update, poor Martha silly doesn't know. At least Hannah seems nice
bttb-rox! Posted June 11, 2007 Report Posted June 11, 2007 Quite a long update .... Chapter 8 INT. HANNAH’S HOUSE (LIVING ROOM) – NIGHT. Hannah: Ollie, this is Katie, my sister. Katie, this is Ollie. He was looking for a place to stay, so I told him about the adoption centre and how we’d love to have him stay. Katie: It's lovely to meet you, Ollie. They shake hands Ollie: Thanks. You too. Hannah: And this is Paul, my husband. Paul: Hi. Ollie: Hi. How you doing? Paul: Good thanks. Paul and Katie leave the room. Nicholas runs into the room Hannah: And this is Nicholas...as you already know. Ollie: Yep. Thanks for introducing me to everyone, but I’m only staying the night. Hannah: Oh, I know. I just want to make you feel at home. Ollie: Thanks a lot. I really appreciate this. Hannah: It’s no trouble. A dog jumps up to Ollie Ollie: Hey. Hannah: Ah, that’s Buzz. Ollie: Hey, Buzz! Cool name. It really suits him. Hannah: Yeah. It was actually my sister’s choice. Ollie: Oh right. You’ve got a good taste in names, Katie. Hannah: Oh no, not Katie. Sorry, I meant my other sister Susan. I have 2 brothers as well. Ollie: Wow! You have a really big family. Hannah: Yeah, they're all staying here while we're setting up the adoption centre. Ollie: Right. Hannah: Susan will be back in about an hour. She said she’s got caught up in traffic. Ollie: Oh, okay. Hannah: How about I get you some hot chocolate? Ollie: That would be awesome, thank you. Nicholas: Can I have a cup too? Hannah: Yes, Nicholas. And then bed, okay? Nicholas: Okay. EXT. THE BACHELOR PAD – NIGHT. Rachel: What are we going to do! Kim: Call the fire brigade! Rachel goes to call the fire brigade on her mobile Martha: Oh no! My ring! Jack: What about it? Martha: It must still be in the house. Jack: Oh no. I'm so sorry, Martha Jack hugs Martha Rachel: This can’t be happening! Kim: Have you called the fire brigade? Rachel: Yes! Kim: Everything is going to be alright. Rachel starts crying. Kim goes to comfort her INT. HANNAH’S HOUSE – NIGHT. Hannah: There you go. Two cups of hot chocolate. One for you Ollie and one for you Nicky. Ollie: Thank you. Nicholas: Thanks, mum. Hannah: So, tell me Ollie, when we saw you at the bus shelter, you said you had somewhere you could go but that you didn’t want to explain as it was a long story. Where do you live? Ollie: I live with a foster family at the Summer Bay Caravan Park. Hannah: Oh really? Ollie: Yeah, they are like a real family to me. Hannah: That’s great. Ollie: Yeah, it is. Sally Fletcher - she’s been taking in children for years. There’s Ric and Cassie, two foster kids living with us, and she’s got a little girl of her own called Pippa. And then there’s... Hannah interrupts Ollie Hannah: Sorry, did you say Sally Fletcher? Ollie: Yeah. Hannah: Fletcher? Ollie: Yeah. Well she was a Saunders before her husband passed away, but then she went back to Fletcher. Hannah: Oh. Ollie: Why do you ask? Do you know her? Hannah: No, no…well not exactly. Ollie: Here’s a picture of her with the rest of the family. Ollie shows Hannah the picture that he packed in his rucksack Hannah: That’s a wonderful picture. Ollie: Yeah, it’s my favourite. Hannah: Anyway, you still haven’t told me why we found you at the bus stop. Ollie: Well, to cut a long story short, I found out that my mother who I thought was dead...isn’t. Hannah: Oh my goodness. Ollie: I know. Hannah: When did you find out? Ollie: Today. Sally was the one who told me. Well, I actually overheard her speaking to her boyfriend Brad. Hannah: Today? Ah, so that’s why you were at the bus stop. You were trying to get away from the situation. Ollie: Yeah, I guess you could say that. Hannah: If there's anything I can do, just ask. Ollie: Thank you. But honestly, I’m fine at the moment. Ollie yawns Hannah: Look, you go and get some sleep, if you can, and then we can talk a bit more in the morning. Ollie: That sounds great, but I doubt I’m going to get any sleep anytime soon. Ollie gets up and starts walking upstairs. Hannah: Don’t forget if you need anything, just ask. Ollie: I know, and thank you. You know what? I think you’re the nicest bunch of strangers I’ve ever met. Hannah: Well, you know what they say. Strangers are people you just haven’t got to know yet. And Nicholas won’t let you out of the house without playing at least 20 games on his game boy. If you do that, you’ll be friends for life! Ollie: Yeah! That’s true. Hannah: Anyway, your room is the one on the left. Ollie: Thanks. Ollie goes into the room, and goes to bed. EXT. THE BACHELOR PAD – NIGHT. Kim: How could this happen? Rachel: I don’t know! The fire brigade arrive. One of the fire crew go to speak to Kim. Fireman: Any ideas how the fire started? Kim: No, we weren’t even here. Fireman: Okay. Rachel is still crying Kim: Just do something! Fireman: We are going to do everything we can to save your house. Rachel: Thank you. Fireman: That’s what we are here for. Martha: Everything is going to be alright, Rachel. Jack: Is there anything we can do? Kim: What can anyone do? We’ve just got to wait. Martha: What about Tony, Beth, Mattie and Lucas? Should we let them know? Jack: Yeah, you could phone dad’s mobile number. They went out to eat in Yabby Creek, but they'll probably be back soon. Martha: Okay. The fire crew start to fire water on the blaze that is quickly burning the whole house down. INT. THE SUMMER BAY CARAVAN PARK HOUSE - NIGHT Brad and Ric are in the living room. Sally comes downstairs. Brad: Hey, Sal. Ric: Errr...I’m just going to go to bed. Night, guys. Sally: Night, Ric. Brad: Night, mate. Sally: Ric, I’m sorry about earlier.. Ric: I know. You’re just worried...we all are. Sally: Yeah. Ric goes upstairs Sally: I owe an apology to you too. Brad: No, you don’t. If anything, it should be the other way around. I do sometimes say one thing and then do another. And I’m sorry for that. Sally: Okay, but it was my fault. I just blew the whole thing out of proportion. Brad: Well, I don’t want to get in another argument with you, so all I’ll say is that maybe you did overreact a little bit. But so did I. Today has been a rough and very long day. I think you need some sleep. I’ll come round in the morning and see how you’re all holding up. And if you hear anything about Ollie, let me know straight away. Sally: I will do. Brad: Thank you. They kiss. Brad walks out of the house. Sally looks at a picture of Ollie on the mantelpiece. She smiles and then walks upstairs.
Zetti Posted June 13, 2007 Report Posted June 13, 2007 Aww Martha's ring is gone Dont know what to make of Hannah yet but everyone else is nice and cool. More please
Roccoluver Posted June 13, 2007 Report Posted June 13, 2007 Its was long chapter, full of awesomeness. I wonder how Hanah knows Sally? and poor Ollie, at least he's with good people and a dog (yay for pets) Martha finally realised she doesn't have her ring ! but this Rachel is still crying Kim: Just do something! When I first read it I busted out laughing, then I realised Kim was talking to the fireman Great update more soon
bttb-rox! Posted June 13, 2007 Report Posted June 13, 2007 Thanks, Zetti and Roccoluver! All will be revealed in regards to how Hannah knows Sally...just not in this part . This is just a quick update: Chapter 9 EXT. THE BACHELOR PAD – NIGHT. Kim: What’s happening? Fireman: To be honsest, after the amount of damage that the house has suffered already, it’s unlikely that your house is going to be habitable. Rachel: Oh no! Kim: I can’t believe this. Fireman: I’m so sorry. But as I said before, we are doing everything we can. At this stage, though, it's unlikely that you will be able to live in the house. Jack: Guys, that’s awful news. Martha: It was all my fault. It was my suggestion that we hang out and have a meal together. Rachel: Martha, this is not your fault. I don’t want you blaming yourself for this. Kim: Rachel’s right, Martha. This isn't your fault in any way. Martha: I guess. But I just feel so bad for you two. Rachel: A house is a house. There are plenty more. Fade EXT. THE BACHELOR PAD – NIGHT. Tony, Beth, Mattie and Lucas arrive. Tony: Hey, Martha, we got your call. What on earth is going on here? Martha: We went out to the Surf Club and then we came back to find this. Tony: That’s terrible. Kim: The fire crew think the damage is irreparable. Basically, they reckon the house is going to be uninhabitable. Lucas: How did it start? Kim: We don’t know yet, mate. Martha: I can’t believe I’ve lost my ring. Jack: Hey, you never know, it might still be in one piece. Martha: Jack, the whole house is on fire. Jack: But not everything gets damaged. Martha: Yeah, but there’s a pretty big chance that it is going to be in this case. Jack sees something glittering faintly amongst the rubble. Jack: Wait a second. What is that? Martha: What? Jack: It’s your ring. Jack runs over into what’s left of the house to get the ring, and starts digging through the rubble. The fire is still blazing throughout the whole house, and Jack is dangerously close to the fire. Martha: Jack, don’t go! Jack!
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