dee83 Posted April 9, 2008 Report Posted April 9, 2008 I have 2 agree she needs 2 let jack dump Lisa and i know him & martha will be feeling guilty but i cudnt stand 2 watch another girl wiv her hands all over his body if she can shes got alot more guts & will power than me shes mad cause i cudnt do it update soon
matticus01 Posted April 9, 2008 Report Posted April 9, 2008 OH MY GOD I HAVE SO MUCH TO UPDATE ON.... Chapter 26 He shook his head vigorously, “Jack doesn’t like to stop” he pouted, his eyes wide open like puppy dogs, as his hand rested on her leg. oh...well maybe not so much *giggles* update soon I loved it...but Jack's right...Lisa deserves to know...sooner rather than later...i was in a similar situation...not going into details
x_kym_x Posted April 9, 2008 Report Posted April 9, 2008 The longer the chapter the better so that was an awesome chapter! Aw they finally got together I can't remember the last time i commented, i always read the latest chapter and love it but i forget to comment sorry But anway back to the point, i loved that chapter and your writing, they're so cute but seriously screw Lisa i'm looking forward to a lustful affair Looking forward to an update
valli Posted April 9, 2008 Report Posted April 9, 2008 Great, loooooong chapter He shook his head vigorously, “Jack doesn’t like to stop” he pouted, his eyes wide open like puppy dogs, as his hand rested on her leg. Jack's so funny and you write him really well Same goes for Martha and Lisa. Lisa being the oblivious one, while Martha wants to prevent things from getting out. Everything the character do, I feel is something that fits with their character, which makes it believable More please!
shortie_689 Posted April 11, 2008 Report Posted April 11, 2008 Wow I just read all of this and it is excellent!!! I can't wait to see where you go next, Jack needs to leave Lisa it is only oing to drive Martha insane!!! Keep it up!!!
vale4eva Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Thanks peeps Warning: Content not suitable for younger readers! Enjoy Chapter 27: It had been an hour and a half since the moment Martha had left the diner, and she had patiently waited in the bathroom for what felt like forever, watching the clock in the distance as each slow second ticked by, and still, Jack failed to make his entrance. Releasing a loud sigh she unplugged the bath, letting out some cold water before turning on the hot tap and reheating the bath once again. She had been lying in the bath for over 45 minutes now, just waiting to surprise Jack with a romantic bubble bath for two. Unfortunately, as of yet there had been no romantic occurrence at all. Instead she sat alone, just watching as the mesmerizing candles on the side began to flicker, as the wax slowly but surely melted away… *Bang* The sound of the front door slamming shut rang down the hallway and into the bathroom. Martha’s heart jumped a mile in her chest at the sudden loud noise, before she smiled, anxiously awaiting for him to appear… “Martha” his voice called out from a distance. “I’m in here” she replied; placing her arms on either side of the bath, her tanned naked chest displayed half above and below the surface of the water to entice him, as she waited for him to come to her. Eventually the door slowly opened; welcoming a cool breeze as well as a somewhat fed up looking Jack Holden. “Hey” he said; his voice hindering slight surprise. His face which previously bore a distressed frown had now disappeared, and his eyes scanned the area set out before him. He smiled down at her sweetly. “Hi” she replied back in a soft and shy voice; strangely becoming overwhelmed with embarrassment. He placed his hands in his pockets, also feeling weirdly uncomfortable. “Umm” he stuttered as he shuffled on his feet; unable to help his eyes wandering down towards her delectable chest, “I’m sorry I took so long, she wouldn’t let me leave” he let out a small and nervous laugh, “and then when I was about to go, Kim and Tasha turned up” he rolled his eyes. “Talk about bad timing huh” he tried to smile. “Yeah” she forced a smile back; pulling her arms back inside the water as she secretly wished there were more bubbles to hide in. “Well, umm … you look comfy” he spoke up awkwardly. “Yeah” she laughed softly, “except I’m slowly but surely losing all of my bubbles” she chuckled as she looked down at the water; watching as the bubbles dispersed, leaving her naked body on full display. “Yeah” he replied softly. “Well, I think I’m going to get out anyway” she continued; “no point staying in here now”. “Yeah … I guess” he added in a subdued tone; suddenly feeling like a total jerk for making her wait. Turning on his heel he began to walk away. “Wait” he halted, “this is stupid” he sighed; as he turned back around to face her “Why are we acting so weird around each other?” he asked her in confusion. “We shouldn’t be feeling uncomfortable, we should be enjoying our time together”. “I know; I hate it when things are weird between us” she sighed, looking up at him through helpless eyes. “Well, how about we stop being total egg heads and start enjoying the night” he smirked. “That is a fantastic idea” she grinned, “and I could sure use some company” she smiled up at him, “and preferably before the bath gets cold again” she smirked. He nodded back, laughing, “That I can do!” he exclaimed with a wide grin. Whipping his shirt over his head he threw it to the side; his jeans soon followed, as did his boxer shorts. Climbing into the bath he sunk himself into the bubbles. “Ahhhh, this is nice” he sighed peacefully. “You know I’ve always wanted to take a bath with a sexy naked lady” he smirked as he shuffled forward into the centre, reaching over to grab her hips before he gently pulled her towards him, her bottom sliding along the plastic base of the bath before coming to a halt. She raised her legs slightly as she wrapped them around his waist, closing any gap there once was and getting herself comfortable. She chuckled as she placed her arms across his shoulders, “And I’ve always wanted to have a bath with a sexy naked man” she grinned, “so I guess it’s a pretty good day for both of us” she laughed. “Sure is” he grinned back; his eyes focused on her lips as he leant forward, capturing her in a loving but passionate kiss. She moaned as his tongue massaged the roof of her mouth, his hands trailing up and down her back making her shiver through delight, while she pushed herself further into him, and sat on his lap; wanting to be as close to him as possible. Pulling away she smiled, “Mhmm, I missed you so much,” she sighed; her dreamy eyes looking across at him. “Me too” he whispered back. They gazed into each others eyes, both not wanting to look away; before they leant inwards, embracing each other in a loving hug. Her head rested on his shoulder as she closed her eyes; enjoying the feeling of having Jacks strong and protective arms wrapped around her small and tiny frame… …………………………… Lifting her out of the bath, he held her in his arms. Her legs wrapped around his waist as her arms encircled his neck. Holding onto her wet body he leant with his back to the wall. “I can’t believe how much I love you” he whispered as he looked deeply into her eyes. “I know the feeling” she whispered back, her breath hitching in the back of her throat as her body slowly moved against him. Together their breaths grew heavier in unison. She closed her eyes as she felt his hand on the small of her back, holding her closer to him and rubbing himself against her. She sighed as she opened her eyes; her movements against him still relatively slow, but wildly pleasurable. “Maybe we should move this into the bedroom” she said weakly as she felt her body begin to throb. He nodded, unable to verbally respond. With shaky legs he walked her into his bedroom, his arms clinging around her body at all times… ……………………… Reaching the bed, he laid her down and hovered above her. She looked up at him through wide eyes; her face looking so innocent, as her body dithered before him; her lips quivering in the cold as she took each long and heavy breath. “It’s cold” she whispered. He nodded, reaching for the covers and pulling them up and over; covering his naked back, “better warm you up then” he smiled as his voice shuddered in a tremble. Leaning down he placed a wet kiss on her lips, before pulling back and looking into her eyes. “You know, ive just thought … This will be the first time we make love as a couple” he hushed down to her, swallowing away the lump which had formed in his throat before continuing, “I don’t know why, but I almost feel nervous” he smiled; his voice still quivering through the cold. She smiled up at his adorableness. “You don’t have to be” she whispered back to him; her hand cupping his cheek before running through is hair, “it’ll be perfect … I know it will …” she spoke in a breath filled whisper. He nodded slowly, before leaning down and kissing her softly on the lips once again. Moving into a comfortable position, they settled themselves down; their moist bodies molding perfectly together as they lay skin to skin. They soon rocked together in a rhythmic motion; allowing for love, desire and sheer passion to completely take them over… ……………………………… (9.30pm) “Why is there never any food in this damn house” she groaned as she slammed the fridge door to a close. “Hmm, I don’t know, maybe it’s because a certain someone decided to eat it all” he smirked, giving her stomach a playful poke. “Hey” she laughed, holding her stomach, “for your information, Elli’s the pig in this household, not me” she stuck her tongue out at him before she giggled. She felt on top of the world, she had just experienced what she could only describe as pure heaven; and it was all because of Jack. She had a wonderful feeling inside of her; like a burst of energy that was so warm and fluffy… it was definitely the feeling of love. Wrapping her arms around his neck she grinned; “Maybe I don’t need food … maybe you just need to take my mind off it” she wiggled her eyebrows at him; her eyes flashing him a look of seduction. “Hmm, I do love a challenge” he said in a deep and sexy voice, before he pulled her in close and kissed her passionately on the lips. She kissed him back; her tongue sliding into his mouth as she tasted his flavor. Pulling away she licked her lips. “Mhmm, who needs food anyway” she mumbled against him, before she leant back in, unintentionally pushing him backwards into the chairs. The two love birds lost themselves in the moment; the world drifting away and leaving only them… *BANG* Their eyes shot open and they quickly pulled apart. Their hearts pounding in their chests like a drum. Their breaths hitched in their throats through sheer adrenaline and panic as they waited to hear further movements … And then it came … “Hey guys, you here?” Tony called out. A look of dread filled their faces as they gasped for a breath; both remaining rigid on the spot as they felt unable to move; their bodies almost as firm as stone. They heard the distinct sound of Tony’s footsteps walking across the laminate floor, with every step he was quickly approaching… Preview: What now for Jack and Martha? Is doom and gloom approaching? Or will they be able to wriggle their way out of this one?
Zetti Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Hehehe, JM in the bath Tony might catch them Hope they can wriggle out of it
KaitieL Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Oh dear. I hope Tony doesn't catch them... I keep on reading the end of the chapters first to find out if they get caught out. Loving it. More please.
Barbara Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Great chapter! Jack and Martha in a bath They're happy and in love. Tony can't catch them. Why did he come home early? More please.
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