Zetti Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Aww, Martha had the tears but it wasnt that bad. Jack had to make up excuses not to sleep with Lisa and she fell for them. Too naive Martha was with Jack first on his birthday So sweet. Lovely JM moments Looking forward to next chapter
KaitieL Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Is sex all that Lisa thinks about? I suppose if I was with Jack I would too. Poor Martha. I have a feeling that it's all going to come out soon. More please.
valli Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Lisa. Is. Too. Annoying. For. Her. Own. Good. Someone's going to hurt her someday Is sex all she can think about? I mean, is "I want to have sex with Jack. Now!" the only thought in her head? The tears were Martha's, but fortunately it wasn't too serious. And yay! Martha was the first person to see Jack on his birthday Favourite part: “I’m too ill to do anything, I must have food poisoning or something” he winged; putting on his adorable pouting face as his beautiful brown eyes opened wide … That was his sad face; he could always make the girls feel sorry for him when he put that one on! Jack is such a cutie and Lisa is so naive More please!
-x-Siana-x- Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Hey! *Waves* Hmm I dont remember when I commented last! My computer broked again! I really do need to invest in a new laptop! I have been reading this though mostly at school when im suppose to be doing ICT Coursework! Its brilliant... They had sex! (Yeh I know that was ages ago now! But Shhh Dont Worry!) Yay! Well done *Claps* I'm glad they did! I still think I should write something about Martha and Tony though... *Evil Laugh* I want Jacky... he's just so lovely! Its amazing as usual! But.... I dont like Lisa... She's weird... And annoying! At least Martha got to be with Jack first on his birthday! Anyways! Sorry for this crappy little reply... that is quite pointless becasue i forgot my point halfway through... But hey... I'm half asleep! Oh Yes! I remember the point now... You need to post more soon! Its fantastic.... More sex would be nice! Siana__x
stephyrose4 Posted May 1, 2008 Report Posted May 1, 2008 Omg do you know how much i love this fic haha it is so good man. I've just spent so long reading the first chapter to the last. It is sooo so good.. More please?? :D:D:D
Zetti Posted May 1, 2008 Report Posted May 1, 2008 I still think I should write something about Martha and Tony Scary thought!
matticus01 Posted May 3, 2008 Report Posted May 3, 2008 that was amazing . . . . Im seriously speechless
vale4eva Posted May 3, 2008 Report Posted May 3, 2008 Thanks people! I love your comments But ARGH! I'm having a bad day everythings going wrong AND I havent revised! Dont like this chapter anymore either *cries* Warning: content not suitable for younger readers! Enjoy Chapter 31: “HAPPY BIRTHDAY!” Cheered Tash as she skipped down the hallway and embraced Jack in a warm and friendly hug. “Thanks” he grinned as he happily welcomed the hug. The four friends sat down on Jack and Lisa’s bed; soon to be accompanied by Martha, as she entered through the front door. “Hey guys” she smiled, raising her hand to acknowledge them. “Happy birthday” she turned her attention onto the birthday boy. “Hey, thanks” he smiled as he rose to his feet, accepting her offered hug. Wrapping his arms around her body, he pulled her close to his chest; smelling her hair as it flew beneath his nose. Although their hug lasted merely five seconds; it meant the world to them both. It was a chance for them to embrace in public, which unfortunately at the moment, was a rarity. “So are you feeling any better?” Lisa asked as she watched them pull away from each other. “Oh” her question briefly caught Martha off guard, “yeah, much better thanks” she smiled as she took a seat beside Jack. “It’s weird that both of you were ill. I guess it must have been something in the food” she frowned as she thought for a moment. “Hmm” both Martha and Jack replied in unison. “So, shall we get to the presents!” Grinned an eager Lisa. “Martha, do you want to go first?” She froze, her face frowning slightly, “Oh …” she looked across at her friends awkwardly, “umm, actually, I didn’t get anything” she released a nervous and apologetic smile as she caught Jacks eye-line. “Martha!” Lisa scolded her comment as she frowned at her friend. “Sorry … we never usually bother with presents, mostly its just dad that gets them,” she tried to justify her behaviour. “It doesn’t matter! It’s his 21st!” Lisa exclaimed in annoyance. “It’s ok, really” Jack piped up, “it honestly doesn’t bother me” he flashed Martha a supportive smile. “Well” Lisa turned her frown into a smile as she focused her attention back onto her boyfriend, “you can open mine first” beamed Lisa; gleefully handing Jack the gift, while Martha sat at the side feeling worthless, her face falling in sadness… …………………………………… (An hour later) Standing around the back of the hotel, wearing their swim suits; Martha leant up and gave Jack a kiss. He had previously whispered into her ear that he required a special birthday kiss, one that only she could give; so, they had slipped away from the rest of the group who were currently swimming in the pool, and made the excuse that they were thirsty. “I still can’t believe you’re 21” she beamed as she stood pressed up against his front, running her fingers through his hair. “I know, it’s weird huh … I still feel like a kid” he chuckled with the shrug of his shoulders; his arms wrapped around her waist. She smiled back, “Oh believe me honey; you’re nothing like a kid”. He chuckled back at her comment, before watching as her face gradually fell; the happiness draining away, and leaving only sadness… “What’s with the long face … I heard birthdays were supposed to be happy occasions” he tried to joke. “I’m sorry” she apologized with a sigh, “I just feel like such a slack … I must be the worst girlfriend ever” she sulked as she let her arms fall down at her sides. “Don’t be silly” he chuckled, “you know that I didn’t expect you to get me anything”. “Yeah but, it’s your 21st, I should have got you something at least … I just, couldn’t think of anything” she looked up at him through wide and helpless eyes. “Martha, I honestly don’t need a present from you … that’s not what this day should be about” he gently rubbed her side, “and besides, you’ve already given me the greatest gift I could ever want”. She frowned in question, looking into his eyes, “Really? What’s that?” He smiled, gently touching her cheek as he spoke, “your heart”. Her face formed into a teary smile; her eyes gradually welling up as she processed his sweet words. Nothing else had to be said, he just presented her with a soft smile, before turning and walking away… Leaving behind a very emotional and overwhelmed Martha… Wiping away the tear that had trickled down her cheek, she shook away her raw emotions; pulling herself together, before eventually following him back towards the group… ………………………… Swaying in the water, her dreamy eyes stayed fixed on Jack; his earlier words running through her head, warming her heart completely. Every so often he would send her a smile; one filled with so much love, and one that was meant only for her… She watched as he slowly made his way towards her; Lisa following close behind. Snapping herself out of her dazed state, she acknowledged them, “having fun guys!” “Yep! We sure are” grinned Lisa, “and are we hitting the bar later on or?” “Yeah, sounds good. And considering it’s my birthday and you’ll all be buying me drinks; its starting to sound even better” he smugly replied. ………………………… (6pm) Carrying the tray holding the glasses of beer, Martha tentatively made her way towards the rest of the group. Dodging and darting the various obstacles before her, she almost made it to her destination. Unfortunately, she failed to notice the stool that had been recklessly left in the aisle. Stumbling into the stool by accident, she tripped over her feet, and the beers went flying … Accidentally spilling over a young well-dressed male who sat at one of the tables... She shrieked as the glasses smashed all over the floor, creating a tremendous sound above the music. “You little bitch!” the man abruptly rose to his feet as he screamed in her face, “I’m soaking!” “Oh god, I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to …” she cried; petrified at what this man could do. “Are you a total idiot!? This is an expensive Jacket you little tramp!” “HEY!” roared Jack; coming intervening before the man laid a finger on Martha, “If I was as rich as you, I could afford some manners!” he harshly pushed him backwards into the wall. Flashing him a fierce look, he warned him with his eyes to stay away, before he turned around to face Martha; ensuring she was ok. Unbeknownst to him, the man had risen to his feet, Grabbing Jack by the arm and swiveling him around. With the swing of his arm, he did he best to slam his fist into Jacks face. However using his many skills, Jack blocked the punch, twisting his arm behind his back and slamming him up against the wall. “Get done!” he growled through gritted teeth, before ruthlessly throwing him out of the exit. Standing at the door, he watched as he stumbled away. Finally rushing over to Martha’s side, he took her into a warm embrace; holding onto her tightly as she trembled in his arms… “Are you ok?” he whispered down to her. She nodded in his chest; before feeling as he kissed her softly on the neck. Both not even thinking about how strange it may look. “Wow Jack, where’d you learn to do that?” exclaimed a bewildered Kim; as he processed the fact that Jack was suddenly some kind of hidden superhero. “Oh, I did taiquando as a kid” he said, as he still kept a firm and comfortable grip of Martha’s frame. “Awesome!” beamed Kim; while Tasha stood at his side, mumbling under breath in a pleasured sigh, “that was so hot” she spoke dreamily; placing her hand to her heart as she let out a girly giggle. Snapping back to reality, and shaking away her inappropriate thoughts, she rushed over to ensure Martha was ok. Meanwhile, Lisa watched from the sidelines, a little uneasy about the level of comfort Jack was giving his sister. “I think I’m going to take her outside … get some fresh air” Jack spoke up, failing to wait for a response as he led Martha out. Lisa watched them with suspicious eyes as they walked away; completely wrapped up in each others arms. Something peculiar was going on here… Preview: Lisa does all she can to fight for the object of Jacks desires.
-x-Siana-x- Posted May 3, 2008 Report Posted May 3, 2008 Wooo! Go Jacky! Bless! I want him! That was amazing! She frowned in question, looking into his eyes, “Really? What’s that?” He smiled, gently touching her cheek as he spoke, “your heart”. ^^^ So cute! Awww That was so However i still do not like Lisa one bit! She better not guess what is going on between them and tell Tony before thet have a chance to tell him! Hmmm... I dont know what else to say! That was just wow... Update soon! Nice Aladdin quote Siana__x
vale4eva Posted May 3, 2008 Report Posted May 3, 2008 Woops! I apeared to have repeated myself with the 'warning' part I guess I just really wanted to warn you guys lol Its all fixed now
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