Zetti Posted November 15, 2007 Report Posted November 15, 2007 Oh My God. Shhess dead!?! Loads of emotion was in that, I can tell you sucessfully put forward the feelings of Martha and Jack, JM were cute and its hard to imagine anyone would want to hurt her Quote
Zetti Posted November 15, 2007 Author Report Posted November 15, 2007 Also another comment, the title is very good and it shows sophiscation Quote
JacknMartha Posted November 15, 2007 Report Posted November 15, 2007 That is very good and descriptive. The best bit was this He stepped over her limp, frail body and he knew she was dead. Her usually brown, glossy hair was now knotted and mangled with blood. Her face wore an odd expression. It was almost as if a moment before he had killed her, she knew she was about to die. It was sad, almost, that she spent the last second of her life, knowing what was coming. Ignorance is bliss and this wasn’t. I loved the one shot and maybe you could add more to it :) Loved the title, very inventive Quote
kaciexox Posted November 16, 2007 Report Posted November 16, 2007 thanks for all your comments guys Quote
-x-Siana-x- Posted November 16, 2007 Report Posted November 16, 2007 You Killed Martha!!!!!! But Apart From That!!!..... That was amazing! Amazing Writing Amazing Storyline Just amazing!!! Loved the title as well!!! Such A Good Writer Siana__X Quote
xmienkiex Posted November 16, 2007 Report Posted November 16, 2007 Oh my gosh! Jack, what have you done! That is so so sad! He killed Martha! Wow! Well written! I just loved how you put it! Wow...can't believe it! Quote
kaciexox Posted November 16, 2007 Report Posted November 16, 2007 Thanks guys Glad you enjoyed it And sorry about killing Martha Quote
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