Drew Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 (edited) OK, I've only read the first chapter so far and I think it's a great story so far! I like the character Ella, but seem to love Bo more. They just seem like down to earth characters with Ella abusing her legal rights to drink etc I love how Alf is still around, half deaf and almost blind It's a good insight into the future, good set up so far. I'll catch up on the rest of the chapters soon. I don't read much fics these days anymore, apart from Damage Control (have to catch up on the Luc ), most fics these days are written by 13 year olds with a paragraph for a chapter. No depth or nothing. I don't know why I'm saying this, but yeah LOL. I'm liking it so far Jem! ETA: I laughed at the lines when Bo revealed his age and Ella then mentioned something about having a baby with him just as he's about to become a man then he replies something like "we'll have to get married first" etc..... That made me laugh. Edited April 30, 2008 by Drew Quote
Luc Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 I don't read much fics these days anymore, apart from Damage Control (have to catch up on the Luc ), most fics these days are written by 13 year olds with a paragraph for a chapter. No depth or nothing. I don't know why I'm saying this, but yeah LOL. I'm liking it so far Jem! No rush Drew. Also, I agree with you there, the only fics I read are the ones written by well established members - or the ones by people who add depth to the storyline, characters and all that. btw, loving this fic Jem, really loving it Quote
emmasi Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 I love how you're incorporating all the babies. Maybe you could have Cassie's baby, a precocious sixteen-year-old that tries to get with Archie, and Ella gets jealous then annoyed at herself for being jealous Unfortunately it's already written (and now I'm just being too lazy to code things all at once), but that would have been a great idea . But to be honest, I had enough trouble keeping up with the characters I've got lol. Thanks for the replies Quote
jack+martha=trooluvv Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Oh yeah, I forgot that it's already written. Never mind Great chapter. Quote
jack+martha=trooluvv Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Great You are such a writer, it makes my fics seem so superficial and stupid. Quote
emmasi Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Great You are such a writer, it makes my fics seem so superficial and stupid. lol, aww... I haven't read any of your fics, but I've been doing this (obsessively) for four years... so I'd want to be doing something right by now . I'm sure you're fics are good, and if you want them to be better then you've got yeeeaaars to keep improving on them - after all, that's the whole point of writing new things, to try and make every fic better than the last (Doesn't always work out that way, but you try lol.) Anyway, thanks for the reply . I wasn't going to post this chapter tonight but H&A spooked me - there were too many similar lines and situations to my fic in it (which always happens to me!!!!!) and I don't like people thinking that I'm copying when I'm not . (Not that anyone necessarily would, but I'm paranoid like that...) I might post another one tonight, but the one after that... I'm sort of waiting to see how something pans out in the news first... *mysterious.* Quote
jack+martha=trooluvv Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Great I am so addicted to your fic I love the "Elbo" relationship or now that he's being called Archie maybe "Elchie?" No, that's just weird... Quote
Jen Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Great last wo updates! I loved how you brought in Kim and Robbie's "one night". It was so perfect I felt so sorry for Ella when she found out about Jonah. Robbie's reaction was so accurate. You write him so well. (Are we supposed to assume that Jonah's the father and they don't know about "Michael"?) Either way, I'm addicted to this fic. You are so descriptive and really capture each of the characters so well. Quote
KaitieL Posted April 30, 2008 Author Report Posted April 30, 2008 Loving the quick updates. Poor Ella finding out about Jonah like that. Glad they didn't end up sleeping together. If I ask nicely, will you update again tonight. Pretty please? Quote
emmasi Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Ohhh if you insist. I'll just have to get off my proverbial and do the coding Thanks for the replies. Re Jonah and or Michael, aaalll will be reveeeaaallled... eventually Quote
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