DinerLandlord Posted May 17, 2008 Report Posted May 17, 2008 This is great, the stalker first time round was weird without Dani, Kirsty and Kane there, but second time round it became totally ridiculous with amost everyone who had anything to do with the original Sarah storyline gone - and people like Jack and Rachel getting wrapped up in it. Thanks for re-writing it the way it should have been.
Tasha-Kit fan Posted May 17, 2008 Report Posted May 17, 2008 This is great, the stalker first time round was weird without Dani, Kirsty and Kane there, but second time round it became totally ridiculous with amost everyone who had anything to do with the original Sarah storyline gone - and people like Jack and Rachel getting wrapped up in it. Thanks for re-writing it the way it should have been. Thank you i'm glad you like it :) i also thought the stalker storyline (even though it was good) was weird without the main people there who Sarah Lewis took hostage and made numerous attempts for revenge on lol the original stalker storyline although no one was around it still had mentions of Sarah... the sequel was just ridiculous and it seemed like Zoe's own personal revenge on the town and Peter, how Jack and Martha became targets is beyond me especially since they never knew Sarah or even Dani lol
Drew Posted May 17, 2008 Report Posted May 17, 2008 Great 2nd chapter! I don't think you're heartless for killing the baby off; you're just merely writting. There's no need to write excuses It was great!... Ant the comment about Hayley's red hair So are we meant to be pictureing Ella? I prefered her then Bec... It all sounds like a good build up so far. Can't wait to see where things go.
Tasha-Kit fan Posted May 17, 2008 Report Posted May 17, 2008 Great 2nd chapter! I don't think you're heartless for killing the baby off; you're just merely writting. There's no need to write excuses It was great!... Ant the comment about Hayley's red hair So are we meant to be pictureing Ella? I prefered her then Bec... It all sounds like a good build up so far. Can't wait to see where things go. Yeah as much as i liked Bec, she was replaced by Ella who is an amazing actress. So yeah i want everyone to picture Ella, Hayley left the show as Ella Scott Lynch so i wanted her back as Ella Scott Lynch
Tasha-Kit fan Posted May 18, 2008 Report Posted May 18, 2008 Chapter Three The next day came painfully slow, when it did finally arrive Robbie and Tasha were still clinging to each other. Robbie however was now awake holding his girlfriend gently, he knew they would be alright. It would take some time and the capture of the heartless monster that did but eventually they would both recover… wouldn’t they? Martha Mackenzie arrived at the hospital as soon as she had learned about what had happened, when she walked into the waiting room only Beth and Irene remained. Everyone else had gone home to get some rest, Martha had learnt about the news from Jack. “How are they?” Martha said sitting herself down next to Irene “Robbie hasn’t even left the room.” Beth sighed. “We thought it best to just leave them too it.” Irene added. “That’s why we sent everyone else home, we didn’t think Robbie or Tasha would be up to seeing so many people after what happened.” Beth spoke. “That’s probably for the best.” Martha said. “The best way for them to recover is to be left too it, it wont help them if they have everyone interfering. We just need to be there if they do need us, even if they never ask at least they know we are supporting them.” Irene decided, Beth nodded. “Does Tasha’s brother know yet? And Josie?” Martha asked. “I never even thought of telling them.” Irene said with a guilty tone. “Its not your fault, we’ve all been preoccupied.” Beth said sympathetically. “Why don’t you guys go home for a rest, I’ll stay here.” Martha suggested “No I want to be here for them if they need me.” Irene said “Same here.” Beth added “What about Belle though?” Martha asked Irene “Matilda as well?” Martha asked Beth “Tony will look after her and make sure everything is okay, he has Kit to help him if he cant manage.” Beth answered “Yeah Hayley is at the house, I’m sure she’ll make sure Belle is okay.” Irene answered “Is Hayley back in the Bay?” Martha asked “She came back last night.” Irene said allowing herself to get distracted “I just want to know why Scott isn’t with her.” Beth said, she too allowed herself to get distracted. “I’m sure Hayley will let us know when it comes to it.” Irene speculated, Beth nodded whilst Martha just looked at them. At the Diner everyone was gathered talking about what had happened “I was shocked when I found out.” Leah Baker said sadly “It’s a terrible thing to happen.” Morag said in a matter of fact tone “Poor Tasha, poor baby.” Colleen said almost weeping “As if she hasn’t already been through enough.” Alf added with a sigh, at that moment Kim walked through the door with a sad look on his face “Have you heard about what happened?” Ric spoke up from a table where he was sat with Cassie “Yeah Rachel told me when she got in from her shift.” Kim replied “Irene rang me and told me from the hospital.” Leah spoke “I feel so sorry for Tasha and Robbie.” Cassie said in a sympathetic tone “It’s not going to help Tasha and Robbie recover having Hayley and little baby Noah around.” Colleen stated “What!” Kim said in shock “I said…” Colleen began “No I heard what you said… Hayley is back in Summer Bay?” Kim said taken by surprise by the revelation. “Didn’t you know?” Colleen crowed “No I didn’t.” Kim said looking completely dumbfounded, then without saying goodbye he turned and left the diner at a quick pace “Well done Colleen.” Morag said plainly “What did I do?” Colleen said also feeling dumbfounded Peter Baker with a couple of officers had returned to the Surf Club to run another search and see if there was any possible evidence they might have originally overlooked the night before, all the locals both old and young watched Peter and the other cops with confusion. As far as they knew nothing major had happened so they didn’t understand why a whole bunch of coppers were hanging around the place like a bad smell, Peter refused to meet their questioning glances. Any slight hint on his part that Zoë McCallister aka Eve Jacobsen being back in the Bay might cause mass panic and since all the cases Peter had been involved in during his time in the Bay connected to Eve or Sarah, Peter didn’t really want to speak to them in case they put two and two together. Peter looked around the area and saw a car pull up close to the Surf Club, he continued to look as the driver’s door to the car opened and out stepped a beautiful brunette… Dani Sutherland. The sight of her almost caused Peter to pass out, he then whipped out his phone “Tracey its Peter, we might have a bit of trouble.” Peter spoke to the female detective down the phone without taking his glance off the eldest Sutherland daughter, he then watched as she disappeared inside the Surf Club. “What kind of trouble?” Tracey asked on the other end of the line, Peter then rushed quickly around the back of the Surf Club to a quiet area where no one could hear “The original victim of Sarah Lewis is back in Summer Bay.” Peter stated “Danielle Sutherland?” Tracey questioned, the cop on the other end had done all her research on Zoë McCallister, Eve Jacobsen, Sarah Lewis and Felix Walters and whatever she didn’t know Peter had filled her in. “If Jacobsen discovers that Dani Sutherland is in town then it might put her in danger, like I said Dani is Sarah Lewis’s original victim and Jacobsen might hold her responsible and decide that to get revenge on her.” Peter explained “So the girl who is responsible for this whole sorry mess is back in town.” Tracey said taking Peter by surprise “Tracey!.” Peter said in a shocked tone “I’m sorry that was uncalled for, I am sure Miss Sutherland never asked for any of this.” Tracey apologized “I think for her own safety we should organize some surveillance for her to keep her safe, maybe an armed police guard.” Peter suggested “What? And blow the secrecy of this case wide open, no Peter we can’t organize any of that. Even if there is a chance of Miss Sutherland or anyone being in mortal peril, everyone will figure out that Jacobsen is back quick sharp. No I think its for the best that we act like Miss Sutherland is just another resident of Summer Bay and not let on that Jacobsen may be coming after her at some point.” Tracey answered. “We will have to let people know at some point, especially Tasha Andrews after what’s happened and Dani Sutherland because of what might happen.” Peter said “Yes and we will let them know in due course, but only when absolutely necessary and the entire towns safety is of critical importance.” Tracey said “Okay… whatever you say, anyway I’m going to continue looking around here at the Surf Club. Give me a call if there are any developments.” Peter sighed “Okay, Miss Vale should be arriving at the station shortly. I will get the statement off her, see you later Peter.” Tracey said from the other end, she then cancelled the call from her phone. Peter just looked at his phone, a look of worry filled his expression. Dylan Russell munched on a sandwich, boredom filled his expression as he did so. He was on his lunchtime break from his job as a mechanic in the city, not his ideal occupation but then again people who had killed their mothers weren’t high on the list of ideal employees. Being a mechanic was his only option to get by, Dylan was then slightly surprised by the vibration of his phone causing him to splutter unexpectedly. He then picked his phone up and answered it “Hello?” Dylan said in a curious tone “Dylan its Irene.” The voice said on the other end “Irene? Hi, to what do I owe the pleasure?” Dylan laughed. “I wish I was ringing you for happier news but I’m not, Dylan don’t get yourself into a panic but its Tasha…” Irene explained “Tasha! What’s happened.” Dylan said throwing his sandwich to the side out of his way “Tasha’s going to be okay, but it’s her baby… Oh Dylan, Tasha has lost the baby.” Irene said, her voice sounded as though it was stung by the sound of her tears on the other end. “What! How did that happen.” Dylan said absolutely terrified for his younger sister “I wont tell you over the phone, its better if I tell you in person. Dylan I think it would help Tasha if you got up to Summer Bay as soon as possible, she needs her family.” Irene said “I’ll catch the next bus up there.” Dylan panicked “Does Josie know?” Dylan added “I was going to ring her after I spoke to you.” Irene answered “Okay, I’ll see you in a short while Irene.” Dylan said “See you later sweetheart.” Irene said, the phone call was then cut off. Dylan looked at his phone and then at his discarded sandwich, his appetite well and truly lost. “Its okay Tasha, I’m coming.” Dylan whispered to himself. Hayley walked slowly down the path alongside the beach, pushing baby Noah along in a pushchair. She sighed unhappily as she reached the Surf Club, maybe it wasn’t such a good idea for her to just up sticks with the baby and leave Scott to come back to Summer Bay “Maybe I should give daddy a call?” Hayley stopping and peering into the pushchair to look at her little boy, she smiled as he let out a gurgle. She then looked away to find her mobile phone in her handbag, as she did however her smiley expression was replaced by that which resembled something a wicked witch would pull as she spotted Dani Sutherland walking out of the Surf Club. She then grabbed hold of the pushchair handles and started rushing off back the way she came, no way did she want to get cornered by that woman. Dani didn’t even bat an eyelid at Hayley as she never recognized her with her new red hair colour, armed with a leaflet for the gym she walked back to her car. Totally unaware of her former best friend running off in the opposite direction Belle yawned as she walked into the halls of Summer Bay High, Matilda and Lucas were already there stood by their lockers at the other end of the hall. The night’s events had clearly exhausted them, Belle was tempted to skive off school but that new girl Hayley or whatever she was called was at the house moping around plus Irene wouldn’t be too pleased if she found out that Belle had been skipping classes. “Hey Belle.” Matilda said awkwardly, she never usually tried to make conversation with Belle but after the night events she decided to try. Both girls and Lucas seemed to be pretty upset about what had happened to Tasha and so Matilda thought it would be nice to extend her kindness and offer Belle someone to talk too “Oh… hey.” Belle said approaching the pair “Are you okay?” Lucas asked the bad girl “Exhausted but yeah I’m okay.” Belle yawned again “I didn’t want to come in school today but Kit made me, she said we should all keep to our regular routine. Tasha and Robbie will be struggling enough, they wont want everyone disrupting their own lives to gather around them.” Matilda explained “Yeah dad was going to let us stay off.” Lucas sighed unhappily “Poor you.” Belle rolled her eyes, she had no time for Lucas if he was going to moan and sigh about not being able to catch up on his sleep, which is the impression Belle got from him. The kid was usually likeable but if he could think about himself during Tasha and his future stepbrothers heartbreak then he needed to sort himself out, the bell signalling the start of lessons then buzzes and the three of them disappeared out of the hallways into their lesson. Sally Fletcher stood at the head of the class with her usual welcoming smile as Belle, Matilda, Lucas and the rest of the class entered and took their seats. “Miss?” a kid called Tim called out “What is it Tim?” Sally asked as she too took her seat “Is it true that Tasha Andrews is dead miss?” the kid named Tim said causing a unison of gasps from the rest of the class, Matilda looked absolutely mortified as did Belle and Lucas. Sally who had only recently heard about the attack also looked shocked. “Where did you hear that?” Sally asked feeling slightly uncomfortable “I heard if on my way to school miss, apparently her own mother rose from her grave and killed her for being prettier than her.” Tim answered, Belle looked at him with a look of pure disgust in her eyes “I can assure you that Tasha Andrews is very much alive, I wont lie to you. Tasha has been admitted to the hospital after an attempt on her life but she survived, whoever told you that she is dead and that her late mother is responsible is having you on. Now if you don’t mind I’d like to carry on with my lesson so there will be no more speculating.” Sally said she then picked up a textbook and started reading aloud. Amanda Vale was back in her car driving once again, she let out a yawn. She too was exhausted after spending the night at the hospital waiting for news on Tasha, she would have spent the day in bed catching up on her sleep but that Detective Tracey Thompson had told her that she would be needed at the police station to give a statement. Once again she was driving past the Surf Club which was on her route to the main road leading to Yabbie Creek, she watched curiously as Peter Baker stood outside the Surf Club speaking to an officer. She also spotted Hayley walking at a quick distance with her baby in the pushchair, she then continued to drive finally pulling out onto the main road. Her attention was suddenly caught by the sight of a black car with blacked out windows behind her through her rear view mirror, a sinking feeling filled her stomach as the car pulled up alongside her. Amanda attempted to slow down but the other car also slowed down, they were now side by side and Amanda gulped as fear took over. The black car then started ramming into her… someone was trying to driver her off the road! Amanda tried to steer out of the way but it was no good, the car was still ramming into her and she couldn’t steer clear, the blonde haired vixen then held on for dear life as the other car driver succeeded in its task sending Amanda’s car out of control. She then screamed and closed her eyes as the car went flying off the road… “Poor Tasha is the talk of the town.” Colleen crowed to Morag who was sat in the diner looking through some papers. “and your not the whisperer this time, life is full of many surprises.” Morag said impatiently. “Well this isn’t the kind of thing well respected people talk about.” Colleen said referring to herself. “Me and my friends don’t like to talk about such heartbreaking things.” The old lady added. “Its quite unfortunate what happened but the townsfolk will soon stop gossiping about and find something else, I’ve no doubt in my mind that you will assist them.” Morag said not looking up from her files, Colleen just tutted at the flame haired legal eagle and went to clean a table. Hayley stopped walking after stopping on the beach down the path from the surf club, for someone who wanted to avoid someone else she was doing a bad job hanging around the place where she spotted the person she wanted to avoid in the first place. She then took baby Noah out of his pushchair and held him in her arms as she sat down in the sand staring out at the ocean. “Fancy seeing you here.” A voice called out, Hayley turned around and to her surprise Kim Hyde was staring back at her “Hello Hayley.” Tasha sat up in her hospital bed, Robbie under Tasha’s orders had gone home a while ago to get a proper sleep in his own bed. Now the young blonde was sat staring into space whilst Rachel checked her over “How are you feeling?” Rachel said softly “Huh…” Tasha said coming back to reality “How are you feeling Tash?” Rachel said in a considerate tone “Aching.” Tasha said simply “The aching will subside soon enough.” Rachel confirmed “Will it?” Tasha asked sadly “Yes we have done everything we can and you will heal soon enough.” Rachel smiled. “My physical injuries will heal yeah… but… never mind.” Tasha said looking away from the friendly doctor “You emotional scars will take a lot longer to heal, who knows they might not heal altogether but as long as you don’t give up on everything and as long as you don’t let what has happened discourage you from trying again for a baby with Robbie then I’m sure in the long run you’ll be fine.” Rachel said “I hope so.” Tasha said weakly, Rachel then sat down next to her fellow Summer Bay resident and strokes her arm “Everything will be fine Tash.” Rachel said, she then leaned over and gently hugged the once naïve young woman. All of a sudden there was a knock on the door “Come in.” Rachel called out, the door then swung open to reveal Tasha’s older brother Dylan Russell on the other side “Dylan!.” Tasha cried out “Tash!.” Dylan rushed quickly over to his sister who was holding her arms out, he then leaned in for a hug as Tasha started crying, Rachel just looked on sadly. Amanda coughed and spluttered as she climbed out of her car which was now bellowing with smoke, after being run off the road the car head gone crashing straight into a load of trees all clumped together. The vixen had a few cuts and grazes on her face due to the front windscreen smashing in the impact, little specs of blood which had dripped from her face slightly covered the jacket she was wearing. “Someone help.” Amanda called out desperately, she then ran up to the road as she heard a car pull to a halt. Her instincts then kicked in making her think it could be the person who ran her off the road but she decided to take a chance anyway, to her happiness when she reached the roadside Alf Stewart of all people pulled up in his white truck. “ALF!” Amanda screamed, Alf quickly opened his car door and jumped out. “What the bloody hells happened here?” the local loveable businessman said in horror “Someone ran me off the road.” Amanda said running over to him, he then put a protective arm around her. “Come on lets get you to the hospital.” Alf said guiding her towards his car. “What about the police.” Amanda said in fear “We’ll call them when we get there.” Alf stated, he then opened the passenger door of his car and helped Amanda to climb in. He then shut the door and went around to the driver’s side, after climbing in himself he started the car and speeded away. In the street outside the Hunter/Holden household in another part of town, a bright yellow taxi pulled up. After a few seconds one of the back doors swung open and out stepped Scott Hunter, after he paid the driver he grabbed his belongings from the backseat, slammed the door shut and walked up to the house. Next Time Hayley and Kim chat about their lives Josie returns to Summer Bay Its lights out for someone at the hospital
maccaz Posted May 18, 2008 Report Posted May 18, 2008 Niiiccce! Hope Amanda's okay....Poor Tasha. Update ASAP.
Tasha-Kit fan Posted May 18, 2008 Report Posted May 18, 2008 Niiiccce! Hope Amanda's okay....Poor Tasha. Update ASAP. Thank you im working on the next chapter as i'm writing this post
Drew Posted May 23, 2008 Report Posted May 23, 2008 Poor Amanda! What does Zoe have against her? hehe. Another great chapter; I didn't even realize you updated it And Scott's back! *shock horror* And Dylan! And Josie next chapter! Josie!!! It's lights out for someone at the hospital... Is that some cryptic clue that you're going to kill someone? Please not Amanda!
Tasha-Kit fan Posted May 24, 2008 Report Posted May 24, 2008 Poor Amanda! What does Zoe have against her? hehe. Another great chapter; I didn't even realize you updated it And Scott's back! *shock horror* And Dylan! And Josie next chapter! Josie!!! It's lights out for someone at the hospital... Is that some cryptic clue that you're going to kill someone? Please not Amanda! haha all will be revealed about Amanda in due course I really wanted Josie in this story because she is a great character plus its not just a random return, its all been set up kind of through the whole attempted murder of Tasha! its all going to tie in to Dani Sutherland as well somehow as a sub plot that isnt connected to the stalker. Dylan should also play a vital part depending on if the story pans out the way i want it too It's lights out for someone at the hospital... Yes its pretty much a cryptic clue, i'm not going to say whether its Amanda or not... I'll leave it as a surprise
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