Eli Posted August 28, 2008 Report Posted August 28, 2008 Thanks for the comments, just thought I'd let you know I think there will be a total of 15 chapter, not 14 like I originally planned. Quote
Jen Posted August 29, 2008 Report Posted August 29, 2008 Amazing Eli. You write both Aden and Belle so well. Their reactions were so perfect. Belle; denial, confusion, anger, upset, acceptance - this chapter had it all. I don't really have much more to add because I like it so much! And we've scored an extra chapter, yay! Quote
solaris Posted August 30, 2008 Report Posted August 30, 2008 Hmmm, you really know how to hit the trigger points don't you? Female clergy Homosexuallity Liberalism in the church (or in some cases lack there of!) You could almost have been writing the agenda for the Church of England Synod! Contentious and emotive...beautifully written. I'm liking how you're tracking both Aden and Geoff's personal struggles. Next update soon please. Quote
Cerise Posted August 30, 2008 Report Posted August 30, 2008 Great work Eli, and cute Gaden scene at the end Quote
Jen Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 I really liked how to challenged Geoff's faith in this chapter and also gave us a bit of an insight into where it all went wrong for him. The ending was very sweet. Quote
Taniya_K Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 Awesome update! Poor Geoff, Aden and Belle but yay for Adelle! Just one thing - this bit confused me “Geoff loves me, and he wants to prove to me just how much,” she thought to herself as she started running again, “Now I need to prove to him how much I love him.” Need answers! Update soooon! Quote
xknomex Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 “Geoff loves me, and he wants to prove to me just how much,” she thought to herself as she started running again, “Now I need to prove to him how much I love him.” ok that really confused me!!! everyone seems to love geoff please update soon Quote
Red Ranger 1 Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 (edited) Yeah, my reaction to that one was "Eh?" as well.Is that supposed to be a sort of sibling love or is there something we've all missed? Otherwise, good work. Edited August 31, 2008 by Red Ranger 1 Quote
Eli Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 Okay, just to clear something up here, major error in the last line, I managed to write "Geoff" instead of "Aden" AGAIN, which obviously caused a lot of confusion. I read your comments and proof read my own chapter like five times without spotting this error (I didn't get why people were this confused) and this isn't the first time I've written Geoff instead of Aden, or the other way around (I edit out most of them, but every now and then one of these errors manage to sneak through my proofing). So to sum up: thanks for reading, sorry my brain isn't working, but it's fixed now. Might be more of these lying around, so just let me know Quote
xknomex Posted August 31, 2008 Report Posted August 31, 2008 oohhhh i get it now!! thanks for clearing that up! i was a bit worried for a minuite there! i'm gald you meant Aden not Geoff! Quote
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