xknomex Posted October 20, 2008 Report Posted October 20, 2008 Thanks soo much for updating!!! you dont have to say sorry about not updating, and it is a really good excuse college comes first. I love adelle in this chapter xxx
LAURZY! Posted October 20, 2008 Report Posted October 20, 2008 You dont have to apologize for not updating, especially when you give us chapters like that!! That was sooo good, loved it all Great update
Lise Posted October 21, 2008 Report Posted October 21, 2008 That was great, well worth the wait! The whole thing was great. The beginning was good as was the end.
zzazzb Posted October 21, 2008 Report Posted October 21, 2008 YAYYYY thank you for updating! that was cute as update again soon.. please
Lustre Posted October 22, 2008 Report Posted October 22, 2008 This chapter is a bit random, I wanted people to see more about the others and this seemed like an okay way to do it. It's short but I'm working on the next chapter and it's about half done so hopefully I'll get that up tomorrow or friday. Thanks for all the reviews its amazing to see people actually enjoy my writing. Enjoy. Chapter 15 She dug her toes into the soft grass enjoying the feeling of the sun beating down on her back, she loved the sun and the heat; it was one of the things she missed the most about home, there was a beach near her old house where she could spend hours just laying out even in the winter when most of the people she knew didn’t, but she was always there. It made her feel warm; inside as well as out. And it also made her feel that just maybe things weren’t as bad as everyone seemed to think. But that’s also how she’d got caught, she thought that she was alone, not another soul insight but she’d been wrong and the sight of her bony ribs and admittedly emaciated frame had elicited an intervention. She should have seen it coming, she hadn’t. She smiled at the teens milling around her enjoying the amazingly sunny day, her friends sitting and laughing amongst themselves as they sat in the gardens surrounding the clinic. No one looking at them in this moment would realise the problems many of them suffered with, the pain of their past experiences that marred their everyday lives and would continue to for the rest of their lives. Drew and Ric were playing Frisbee not far from where she was laying on her front watching the world before her. She laughed as Ric dived skidding across the grass as he reached towards the Frisbee catching it before it hit her, she didn’t even flinch, she knew he’d get to it before it got too close, she trusted him with her life so the likelihood of the Frisbee touching her was very low. She smiled up affectionately at the boy she loved pecking his cheek as he leaned down to her. She remembered the first time she had met him, he was the newest patient and his anger problems were still ruling his life. He told her she calmed him down when the world got too much, he confided in her about his father and their problems, and she did the same. Along with Belle they were best friends for months before they got together, it took a new patient hitting on her and him hitting the guy before she realised how he felt. They’d survived through life in the clinic and separation when she had been allowed return home, that hadn’t lasted long any of the three times she'd been released in the last two and a half years so there hadn’t been much to worry about. They’d all been friends with Drew as long as she’d been dating Ric, he was the guy he’d punched out for coming onto her. He’d apologised and that had been it, they were friends, it was simple, kinda like Drew, she giggled internally at that. But laughed aloud as she saw the boy in question suddenly jump on Lucas missing the Frisbee entirely. The dark haired boy stood shaking his head and laughing wolfishly as he dragged the blond from where he was sitting on the ground exasperatedly trying to carry on a conversation with the happy couple the residents of the clinic had affectionately nicknamed Adelle. Her smile brightened as she watched the couple interact, Aden teasing Belle as he held the magazine she had been reading above her head a cheeky smirk on his face. She’d never seen Belle as happy as she’d been the past few months, and while it made her a little sad that her friendship was not enough to help her she was still happy for the brunette. They both entered the clinic on the same day, it was a total coincidence but one that cemented their friendship. Belle’s mood had been dark, she’d just been released from hospital to be dumped in the clinic, it was enough to depress anyone, her mood had also been similar the resentment she felt for her family forcing her into therapy overwhelming her. It was the beginning of one of the strongest relationships she had in her life. And seeing Belle lately laughing and smiling and all the effort she’d been putting into her therapy made her proud and joyful at the same time. If Aden was the reason for that then he had her blessing as the best friend. He was a good guy and a good friend. Spinning onto her back as her friends shared a moment, Aden whispering quietly in belles ear as she smiled brightly at him, Mattie sighed in contentment a grin forming on her face as Ric dropped down beside her an arm wrapping around her waist, she closed her eyes and thanked whoever or whatever out there blessed her with the friends she had made in this unusual place.
Taniya_K Posted October 22, 2008 Report Posted October 22, 2008 *wipes away tear* That was just brilliant. I love how there are no dialogue in that at all, but just Mattie describing it all through her thoughts. Too beautiful. She laughed as Ric dived skidding across the grass as he reached towards the Frisbee catching it before it hit her, she didn’t even flinch, she knew he’d get to it before it got too close, she trusted him with her life so the likelihood of the Frisbee touching her was very low. That was just prefect. I want a guy like that! Cannot wait for more! Please update soon! xoxo
xknomex Posted October 22, 2008 Report Posted October 22, 2008 Wow that was just...wow *tear* That was so beautiful. I loved it, the descriptions of everyone. How do you write like that!?!? I love how 'Adelle' ended up in the chapter, Cant wait till the next chapter Update soon xxxx
LAURZY! Posted October 22, 2008 Report Posted October 22, 2008 That was so so good, really quite emotional! The descriptions of their personalities and relationships towards one another was just perfect Fantastic update, looking forward to reading more
Lise Posted October 23, 2008 Report Posted October 23, 2008 That was great! It was beautifully written, can't wait for more.
zzazzb Posted October 23, 2008 Report Posted October 23, 2008 admittedly emaciated frame had elicited an intervention. try saying that ten times fast Drew and Ric were playing Frisbee not far from where she was laying on her front watching the world before her. She laughed as Ric dived skidding across the grass as he reached towards the Frisbee catching it before it hit her, she didn’t even flinch, she knew he’d get to it before it got too close, she trusted him with her life so the likelihood of the Frisbee touching her was very low. She smiled up affectionately at the boy she loved pecking his cheek as he leaned down to her. thats too cute. Taniya, if you find a guy like that, make sure he has a twin for me great update, it was great that it was all through Matties thoughts, really interesting. well done looking forward to more.
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.