Unexpected (by adellejefferiesxox) - comments

[Red Ranger 1]

Good chapter, loved Nicole being there for Aden.Sean turning up at the end was a real shock.

[Jen]

Another good chapter. Aden getting drunk so he didn't have to deal, was very realistic. And I'm glad it was Nicole who got him down.

Take care Aden, enjoy life, raise our daughter well and I love....

“I love...” It was cut off, Aden looked confusedly. “Belle, where’s the rest?” Aden asked out loud. “I love....”I love....” Aden spoke as if he was talking to the letter itself.

^ I adored this bit particularly. A half written letter is always tough. (Being a Harry Potter fan, I immediately thought of the letter by Lily that Harry found at Grimmauld Place - but that's not really relevant here). Still, what I'm trying to say, is that you never quite know how the other person was going to finish, you kind of just need to figure it out for yourself. Like - so close, yet so far.

I'm not sure if any of that made much sense, and I'm probably over-analysing your story. But I really liked that part.

Bringing Sean back was a nice twist too. Keep up the good work.

[adellejefferiesxox]

Thanks Jen, yer I've haven't read the Harry Potter books (head down in shame) lol. I watch the movies though! And yes your post made sense, and I like it when people analyse my fics It's good.

[**Julie**]

Awww Poor Aden.

Loved how Nicole was there for Aden.

Sean coming back was definitely unexpected.

Another brilliant chapter. Can't wait to read more.

Edited May 21, 2009 by **Julie**

[KaiyaBlake]

Aden

Seans back? That can't be good. Especially the way he was acting to Leah!

Loved it. Can't wait for more

[jack+martha=trooluvv]

Aden

Nicole is so nice, I'm glad she stopped Aden from jumping

And Sean Don't like HIM already

[~Zoe~]

Just read the whole fiction

Aden

Its good that Nicole talked him down, and that she stopped him from jumping

Sean coming back, that was unexpected.

Loved it, looking forward to reading more

[Taniya_K]

Whoa, thank God for Nicole! Never thought Aden would try that, but I'm glad she talked him down. Esp for Adelle's sake Poor guy though. And that letter from Belle was great too. I really hope she was going to say 'I love you' too.

Sean at the end was I hope he doesn't cause trouble!

Cannot wait for more!

[adellejefferiesxox]

Thanks guys, I'm relieved you liked the last chapter. I'm not sure when I'll update next because I have to work and I'm too tired to write it right now (Just finished work). I'm just dying to write another chapter though I've got plenty of ideas. Also if you think the drama is over, ya wrong . It's still gonna get worse. I know I'm evil!

[jack+martha=trooluvv]

First comment, yay!

That chapter wasn't crappy at all, btw.

And.

Oh.

My.

God.

That was so UNFAIR and MEAN! They didn't have any solid proof that he raped that chick.

*worries*

Update soon!