Red Ranger 1 Posted September 7, 2011 Report Posted September 7, 2011 Congratulations, Elikell!And well done loz for your entry.Re:Identity of the narrator, I got that Roo was the most likely candidate but I did wonder for a few lines if you were going to pull a twist and have it turn out to be Duncan or someone, especially with the theme being comebacks.
lozlovesh&a Posted September 7, 2011 Report Posted September 7, 2011 Congratulations, Elikell!And well done loz for your entry.Re:Identity of the narrator, I got that Roo was the most likely candidate but I did wonder for a few lines if you were going to pull a twist and have it turn out to be Duncan or someone, especially with the theme being comebacks. Ah okay. You know I did almost think of that but decided against.
pembie Posted September 7, 2011 Report Posted September 7, 2011 Congratulations, Elikell Your story was written with such emotion and the ending was a shocker. Well Done loz on your story I was also a bit confused why people were confused with the Identity of the narrator being Roo I got it but maybe people were waiting for a twist with subject being comebacks It was a good idea through and really well written
Jen Posted September 7, 2011 Report Posted September 7, 2011 Congrats!! And can I just ask... I'm really confused as to why people (there were a couple) that didn't somehow understand my story, can you guys explain why? Cos I thought that it was pretty straightforward tbh. And actually I think someone was confused as to how it was Roo, well in the like 3rd sentence she said Dad... no one else on the show atm calls Alf, dad lol. I'm not being rude here I just really want to know maybe I can work on it or something. Similar to what others have already said, I understood that it was being told from Roo's POV very early on, but I tend to assume that if you tell a story from first person that there are going to be some sort of extra thoughts and feelings given, because I want to feel like I'm inside that person's head. There just wasn't enough of that for me. But that is not to say it wasn't a good story, because it totally was . Hope that helps.
lozlovesh&a Posted September 8, 2011 Report Posted September 8, 2011 Congrats!! And can I just ask... I'm really confused as to why people (there were a couple) that didn't somehow understand my story, can you guys explain why? Cos I thought that it was pretty straightforward tbh. And actually I think someone was confused as to how it was Roo, well in the like 3rd sentence she said Dad... no one else on the show atm calls Alf, dad lol. I'm not being rude here I just really want to know maybe I can work on it or something. Similar to what others have already said, I understood that it was being told from Roo's POV very early on, but I tend to assume that if you tell a story from first person that there are going to be some sort of extra thoughts and feelings given, because I want to feel like I'm inside that person's head. There just wasn't enough of that for me. But that is not to say it wasn't a good story, because it totally was . Hope that helps. Oh okay, that's cool. Thanks for replying.
Zetti Posted September 8, 2011 Report Posted September 8, 2011 Personally I thought your story was good Loz but I didn't really think it was meant to be that obvious that it was Roo which is why I thought it wasn't and then got confused. Well done though & congratulations Elikell for winning
elikell Posted September 9, 2011 Report Posted September 9, 2011 Wow, I won? Thanks for all the congratulations. Sorry its taken me so long to reply. I've been away on holidays and don't have ready access to the internet. Loz, your entry was amazing. I was more just confused about the opening line of 'Yoo hoo, only me' because that was always Colleens line. Although I did realise that it wasn't Colleen pretty quickly! lol. Okay, so for the next contest... Contest #27 Something is wrong with Alf, but what? And how will it be resolved? I know this is very open-ended, but I just want to see where your minds go and what you all come up with... Word limit: no more that 4000 words. Entries need to PM'd to me by October 10. 8pm AEST. If you have any questions, please let me know. I'll try to get on the computer a bit more often when I get home to answer any questions you may have. I look forward to reading what you all come up with
elikell Posted October 11, 2011 Report Posted October 11, 2011 Sorry its taken me so long to get back to this. I'm gonna open this contest for another week, as I only have one entry so far. Please, please, please enter something and keep this competition running! Please PM me your entry by October 20th. Thanks
elikell Posted October 19, 2011 Report Posted October 19, 2011 Okay everyone, 24 (or so) more hours until this contest closes. Please enter something, anything, even if it's only short. PM entries to me ASAP.
elikell Posted October 23, 2011 Report Posted October 23, 2011 So what happens if I've only gotten one entry? What happens to the competition then? Do I just post the entry anyway so the writer can get feedback?
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