Just Moved Here (by *caitie*) - comments

[Jen]

Great chapter, the build up was good. I don't know whether a teacher would leave his class, even for a moment while there is a gunman loose, but still I can see why you had to write it like that. (I only say because I find constructive criticism helpful) Wonder who the gunman is? The plot thickens. Hope you update soon.

[*caitie*]

yeh I didn't think it was very realistic after I read it over, but I'd already posted it and couldn't be stuffed to go over it again! Thanks for the constructive critisism! I really need that so i sort of know what to write so thanks!!!

[matticus01]

wow that was great no matta how short it was...

update soon

that was so close

[*caitie*]

ooh!!I need to do some spoilers!!!

Martha and Jack have some HUGE news!!What is it??

And Lucas has another dream, and dreads it more than any other, what is it??

[Jackieleanne]

Just read it and this is a really good story love it, glad that they are ok and dreading what is going to happen next. Great work

[matticus01]

martha and jack have huge news.............PREGNANT?

Luc has another dream and dreads it more than any other................ oh god please have nothing to do with Mattie

[Jackieleanne]

Awww sweet chapter Mattie and Lucas godparents bless and Martha and Jack Parents. Tut tut Martha having wine and loved Lucas reaction to the wine.

[Jen]

Woah, what a cliff hanger! The Lucas dream was very eery and scary. That bit was written exceptionally well. Can't wait to see what's happening next.

Merry Christmas!

[matticus01]

omg that was so f***in beautiful i loved it... but what's wrong with Lucas?

Please let him be ok and please update soon :lol:

[Jen]

Oh, I was hoping for more than that. A well written update, especially the descriptions of how Lucas was feeling. More soon, hopefully?