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Fab update! I agree with matticus, Lucas dream can't come true! Well, if it does I hope he's ok. Maybe the person shooting misses him or something. Hope so...

The action in this chapter was great. It all came together well at the end.

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So much emotion! Brilliantly written, you are definitely getting better and this story has progressed. Nice cliffhanger ending, I hope Luc is ok.

A tear slid down his cheek and landed on my shirt. He grasped my hand and he was the last thing I felt before I blacked out I really like that line. You created so much tension, but also gave each character their own weaknessness which makes them easier to relate too. Great work! :)

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