I'll Be With You Until The End (by callyha) - comments

[carywary]

Well I liked it

I liked the bit where Charlie said she wouldn't give up without a fight, she's a true soldier! I thought you wrote the bit with Rachel really well, the way she handled it, the way she wasn't sure if it was Charlie's x-ray and when Charlie confirmed that it was she didn't persist and ask more. I'm glad Charlie said to Rachel about the crack before Rachel had to ask, such an awkward conversation for both of them to be having. Morag she is some woman! That bit really made me laugh, only Morag could pull it off! I hope Xavier does ask Ruby out, although I'm not sure that she's ready to let someone in right now. It's lovely how he knows that something's up, even though the others don't.

Update soon!

[HighwayUnicorn]

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Edited September 17, 2012 by HighwayUnicorn

[Danni02]

Loved that one!

"Rach?" Tony said, but Rachel didn't answer. "I pushed Harry down four flights of stairs and then Xavier took him swimming and Harry swam thirty lengths" Tony smiled

"That was nice" Rachel replied, unaware of what she had heard.

That made me giggle. Poor Rachel feeling so bad for not listening when Charlie was going to talk to her. I like that Tony told her to go back as it was bothering her so much. I liked Charlie and Ruby's little chat. Everytime someone says "I'll be with you until the end" I get the biggest smile on my face. Its so sweet. But what are you doing! That ending its just evil, evil I tell you! What is Charlie going to do/say! You cant leave it there!

Update soon, loving this!

Edited September 5, 2010 by Danni02

[carywary]

Ah cliffhanger what happens next! I thought that was a really good place to leave it cos there's been such a build up to this moment, but I really want to know what happens! I loved Rachel's "that was nice" to all the stuff Tony said he and Xavier did to Harry, that made me laugh I wonder what stage she'll arrive back at? Cos I would say that Rachel knowing she was pregnant will sort of get pushed to the side of Charlie's mind after Angelo's revelation, go Angelo!! That bit with Charlie and Ruby where Ruby said she would be with her when they told people, especially Colleen, and that she would be with her until the end, that was so beautiful and moving, well written! I love how Angelo was pacing one minute and then he just burst into the room and told Charlie, loved how their mouths were open! Brilliant chapter, I really better stop now!! Update soon please

[Chester-Sam]

Loved Charlie & Ruby's little chat

Their relationship is beautiful.

- Sam!

[Inactive User]

Beautiful update! Loved Charlie and Ruby's chat Update soon please xx

[charlie29]

Loved it! So pleased Angelo has finally told Charlie he loves her, hope her response will be good. Nice to see how much Rachel cares about Charlie and that she's gone back to talk to her. Brilliantly written as usual

[Danni02]

Loved that one!

She loves him too, she loves him too, she loves him too! I squealed like a little girl when I read that! Loved there little chat. Aww And Ruby's excitment made me laugh. Bless Xavier being all nervous for asking Ruby out. "No, they didn't die" Chalrie rpelied. They? They didnt die? I'm intrigued! Did she have more than just Ruby?! Cant wait for more of this!

Update soon

[callyha]

[q]No, they didn't die" Chalrie rpelied. They? They didnt die? I'm intrigued! Did she have more than just Ruby?![/q]

I put 'they' coz i thought it was better than writing 'it' Sorry to disappoint Danni! Sorry

But thanks for the comment

[HighwayUnicorn]

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Edited September 17, 2012 by HighwayUnicorn