beckyboo Posted February 25, 2007 Report Posted February 25, 2007 Great update But I think I no why he walked out when Martha said she loved him: His mum said she loved him but left him So he thinks because Martha loves him she will leave him He and Martha need to have a serious talk and she can assure him that shes not leaving him and alls right with Jack and Martha again Update soon Kat xxxxx Quote
kayla Posted February 26, 2007 Report Posted February 26, 2007 oh, the teenage angst! lol.... that chapter was INCREDIBLE kat! u really know how to get into the characters minds, even though most of themseem to need therapy! lol brilliant work, update soon! Quote
tasha7905 Posted February 28, 2007 Report Posted February 28, 2007 Fantastic chapter. I really loved being inside Jacks head, the way his mother left and his relationships with women was describe amazingly, It shows how deeply his mother hurt him the emotion in your writing was great. I really cared about what he was feeling adding Lucas into the flashback was good too it made it not just about Jacks own emotions but young Luc's too. I hope Jack manages to find a way past his problems and admits that he loves Martha too. I cant wait to read more im hooked. Quote
I love music Posted March 1, 2007 Report Posted March 1, 2007 oh, the teenage angst! lol.... that chapter was INCREDIBLE kat! u really know how to get into the characters minds, even though most of themseem to need therapy! lol brilliant work, update soon! It's the writers who need therapy!!! Quote
Jamey-Maria Posted March 2, 2007 Report Posted March 2, 2007 (edited) That was absolutely fantastic. (and that could have had something to do with there being no Haley ) I thought the scenes with Luc and Jack sounded so adorable, and hearfelt. You write it so genuinely and I now have an incredible in depth and detailed understading about Jack and more importantly why he does what he does. The characterisation on him is really brilliant. And Gyps That's some really dark stuff, but at the same time totally gripping. What I really love about this fic though is the way even if a chapter is focussing on only a few characters and their back catalogue (e.g this chapter with Gypsy and Jack) you still manage to give subtle refernces and weave in some of the others, making them totally in character at the same time. Nothing is ever irrelevant, like the bit about Cassie appraoaching Jack and the little description that came with it. Now that's what I call a talented author, well done. Edited March 2, 2007 by Jamey-Maria Quote
I love music Posted March 26, 2007 Report Posted March 26, 2007 OMG, will someone say whether this chapter is any good or not..? It's the first full chapter I've written since Chapter 11 and I did say to Kat that I felt it wasn't very strong (I have a lot on my mind over my job so I'm not writing at my best). Quote
Adia Posted March 27, 2007 Report Posted March 27, 2007 That was awesome ILM. I've missed your writing so much!!! I think it gave some really good background to what the characters are feeling and stuff like that. Especially Martha. I liked how you wrote about her brothers and how Hayley tried to make her blend into te crowd rather than upstage her, I think if anyone could take Hayley's crown it would be Martha! I liked how she befriended Cassie too. That shows how genuine she really is. The first paragraph was brilliant. The description really set the scene, I almost felt like I was there. Love how you write Kane I can't wait to see what happens next! Quote
Skykat Posted March 27, 2007 Report Posted March 27, 2007 Well I thought that was an awesome chapter. I don't think you've ruined it at all, if it wasn't for you we wouldn't have a chapter at all because I do not feel like writing at the moment. The Kane stuff is awesome, he's so dark and dangerous, I've just got such a sense of foreboding from him and after what he just did to Hayley...poor Cass. At the same time I feel sorry for him too, hes had a touch life and maybe in Cassie he'll be able to feel more sympathy towards her? Its great to see some of Martha's past explored as well, makes her seem more human and more real when you dig into the background. I love her depth of affection to Cassie and Cassie's s vulnerable, pushing Martha away. I'm getting really worried about Cassie, she seems like a girl on the edge. I thought it was an excellent chapter and paves the way for lots of exciting stuff to come. Thank you so much for posting for me, I really appreciate it, just maybe I might actually write some of my own story sometime soon. Quote
Chair Posted May 24, 2007 Report Posted May 24, 2007 Thanks, Kat and I love music. Wow. You have really got into the characters' heads and made me feel so sorry for them. The writing is amazing. Quote
sevenpuddings Posted May 24, 2007 Report Posted May 24, 2007 Yes Nicole, I'm a big ol' meanie! Have a great birthday hun. And just so this isn't spam... BEST STORY AROUND THESE DAYS! Do yourself a favour, if you wanna read some of the best written stuff on this site, read this story! You'll be amazed at how stunning it is! Quote
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