pembie Posted May 1, 2011 Author Report Posted May 1, 2011 Wow, this is incredibly well-written.(And you've picked up the grammar and punctuation really well too.)Aden's kind of caught between a rock and a hard place, either way he's going to be left without Belle.Looking forward to more of it! Thanks Red Ranger but I'm having help with grammar and punctuation from Elissa (eilkell) so can't take all the credit for that glad you guys are enjoying it Quote
Red Ranger 1 Posted May 4, 2011 Report Posted May 4, 2011 Felt sorry for Nicole at the start.Curious to know who that was at the end.Looking forward to more. Quote
Miranda Posted May 4, 2011 Report Posted May 4, 2011 This is good, I am having a break from reading and writing fanfic now but I do like yours. Belle is so cheeky. I liked the details of the boy and the sandcastle, it was very realistic Quote
pembie Posted May 4, 2011 Author Report Posted May 4, 2011 Felt sorry for Nicole at the start.Curious to know who that was at the end.Looking forward to more. Thanks Red I have big things coming up for Nicole and your find out who was at the end in next part This is good, I am having a break from reading and writing fanfic now but I do like yours. Belle is so cheeky. I liked the details of the boy and the sandcastle, it was very realistic Thanks Miranda I have the whole story in my mind and I can picture all my ideas and I just try my best to bring the ideas to life as I write them hope thats coming across Quote
Zetti Posted May 4, 2011 Report Posted May 4, 2011 I felt sorry for Nicole Its good so far. Want to read more soon x Quote
HighwayUnicorn Posted May 4, 2011 Report Posted May 4, 2011 That was an amazing chapter. I loved Belle being cheeky & everything. Poor Aden I look forward to more, update soon, please Love Carina xxx Quote
Miranda Posted May 9, 2011 Report Posted May 9, 2011 haha! April/May indeed! Loved Aden, Dex and April's interaction. Aden being the teasing big brother type Quote
Zetti Posted May 9, 2011 Report Posted May 9, 2011 “Oh yes, torn between two lovers. Oh I’ve been there,” Dexter said dreamily. “I doubt that very much,” Aden laughed. “Well maybe not. But I have in my dreams,” Dexter admitted. “Well what about April here?” Aden said. He nudged his head in April’s direction. April looked at Dexter with red blushing cheeks. “No, we’re not a couple, just good friends,” Dexter spluttered. He sprayed Colleen’s apron with chewed hamburger as she rushed past with a mop. “Oh Dexter. You’ll be a couple soon enough. I have an eye for these kinds of things,” Aden said cheekily. Dexter was too busy gulping down big mouthfuls of water from the jug on the table to answer. When he calmed down and could talk without coughing, he went on. Haha My favourite bit! Dex never fails to make me laugh! Quote
HighwayUnicorn Posted May 9, 2011 Report Posted May 9, 2011 Loved the whole April, May thing there. Everything in that chapter was amazing ... perfect interaction, well done. Love Carina xxx Quote
Red Ranger 1 Posted May 9, 2011 Report Posted May 9, 2011 Dexter was brilliant.Wonder if his Romeo and Juliet theory is right...Wow, was not expecting that ending. Quote
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